Loose Footing

I slip under
Like deep thunder
The sun ending
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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La France Avatar
August 2, 2011 at 4:28 PM
What an interesting form, I really must give this a try, and thanks for your comments on my poem, there is lots of unsaid meaning in my poem, much unwritten~~
Dietrich Avatar
August 2, 2011 at 12:13 AM
This is really cool!
Mehta Avatar
August 1, 2011 at 9:18 PM
Nice attempt at Than-Bauk
B Avatar
August 1, 2011 at 11:03 PM
Thanks, but does "attempt" imply that I screwed up somewhere? A learning experience is priceless, would appreciate criticism :)
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