Notes About The Poem

This form is a 7/5 Trochee which was created by Andrea Dietrich in her pre Poetry Soup days. A 7/5 Trochee contains 2 or more quatrain stanzas with a syllable count of 7/5/7/5 and a rhyme scheme of a/b/c/b or a/b/a/b. The meter is trochee, which means alternating stressed and unstressed beats in each line, with each line beginning and ending with a stressed syllable. In this poem I included internal rhymes in the first and third line of each stanza.

Looking At the Moon

High in sky the moon drifts by up above the land. Warming glow on those below lovers hand in hand. Through the years her name appears written down in time. Verse by verse the words disperse in a poet’s rhyme. We both knew as our love grew on that day in June; love so hot we’d tie the knot looking at the moon.
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Gauthier Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 10:15 PM
Congrats on your top win, John.
Gondolf Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 10:18 PM
Thanks, Line, I appreciate it.
Allison Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 6:27 AM
wow John you nailed this challenging form, i love the rhyme in this beautiful poem, many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
Gondolf Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 6:37 AM
Thank you, Jan, I appreciate it.
Tripp Avatar
June 1, 2018 at 7:23 PM
Congratulations! Brian is a tough cookie and placing first in one of his contests speaks volumes for your talent. Awesome job!
Gondolf Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 6:35 AM
Thank you, Rhoda, I appreciate your support.
Gentry Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 8:05 PM
Back to say congratulations! I like this form and moon poem makes it all the better. Congratulations on your #1 win!
Gondolf Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 9:45 PM
Thank you, Susan, I appreciate it. John
Rodrigues Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 4:26 PM
Just beautiful, John! I see why you won! Congrats!
Gondolf Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 5:19 PM
Thank you so much, Kim, I appreciate your support. John
Cunningham Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 3:36 PM
A lovely romantic verse John, congratulations. Tom
Gondolf Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 5:15 PM
Thanks so much, Tom, I appreciate it. John
Warrior Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 9:24 AM
You do her proud, John...great trochee...love and light...^WW^
Gondolf Avatar
May 31, 2018 at 11:04 AM
Thanks, WW, I appreciate it. John
Dietrich Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 6:27 PM
wow, you showcased my form PERFECTLY, John!!! Not many people do it right with the meter, so I appreciate this so much. Also, I love poems about the moon. And this hot poem gets a fave!
Gondolf Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 9:09 PM
Thanks so much, Andrea, I’m pleased that I was able to do your form justice and I’m so happy that you liked it. I appreciate your support. John
Devonshire Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 5:08 PM
A beautiful love poem, John. I like the idea of having a moonlit wedding in June. And I enjoyed the form as well, especially the rhymes within lines. A lovely rhythm is created by the alternating stresses. Well done! Hugs, Carolyn
Gondolf Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:56 PM
Thank you so much, Carolyn, I appreciate your comments and I’m glad you enjoyed the poem. John
Gentry Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 10:25 AM
A joy to read. I'm just learning about stressed and unstressed and feel it here. Love the poem and the form.
Gondolf Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 12:45 PM
Thanks, Susan, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I just started paying close attention to the meter about 5 months ago. I think a poem flows much better and is easier to read if you stick to a set meter. John
Sands Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 9:02 AM
Very nice John. A beautiful, peaceful poem to read :)
Gondolf Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 9:11 AM
Thank you so much, Heidi, I'm glad you enjoyed it. John
Tripp Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:14 AM
Honored to be the first to comment on this well written beauty. So much love here in these words. It is awesome. I also like the form. The rhyme scheme flows well. Have a great week, my friend.
Gondolf Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:38 AM
Thank you, Rhoda, I appreciate your support. John
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