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This form is a 7/5 Trochee which was created by Andrea Dietrich in her pre Poetry Soup days. A 7/5 Trochee contains 2 or more quatrain stanzas with a syllable count of 7/5/7/5 and a rhyme scheme of a/b/c/b or a/b/a/b. The meter is trochee, which means alternating stressed and unstressed beats in each line, with each line beginning and ending with a stressed syllable. In this poem I included internal rhymes in the first and third line of each stanza.

Looking At the Moon

High in sky the moon drifts by
up above the land.
Warming  glow on those below
lovers hand in hand.

Through the years her name appears
written down in time.
Verse by verse the words disperse
in a poet’s rhyme.

We both knew as our love grew
on that day in June;
love so hot we’d tie the knot
looking at the moon.

lovemoonrhyme

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Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 6/24/2018 6:05:00 PM

The description sounds complex, kudos on your win. It reads beautifully, John.

John Gondolf
Date: 6/24/2018 9:03:00 PM

Thank you, Susan. I enjoy trying new forms which I haven’t tried before; I like the challenge. I especially liked this one since it was a form that Andrea had created. I’m glad you enjoyed reading it. John

Line Gauthier

Date: 6/2/2018 10:15:00 PM

Congrats on your top win, John.

John Gondolf
Date: 6/2/2018 10:18:00 PM

Thanks, Line, I appreciate it.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/2/2018 6:27:00 AM

wow John you nailed this challenging form, i love the rhyme in this beautiful poem, many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

John Gondolf
Date: 6/2/2018 6:37:00 AM

Thank you, Jan, I appreciate it.

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 6/1/2018 7:23:00 PM

Congratulations! Brian is a tough cookie and placing first in one of his contests speaks volumes for your talent. Awesome job!

John Gondolf
Date: 6/2/2018 6:35:00 AM

Thank you, Rhoda, I appreciate your support.

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/31/2018 8:05:00 PM

Back to say congratulations! I like this form and moon poem makes it all the better. Congratulations on your #1 win!

John Gondolf
Date: 5/31/2018 9:45:00 PM

Thank you, Susan, I appreciate it. John

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/31/2018 4:26:00 PM

Just beautiful, John! I see why you won! Congrats!

John Gondolf
Date: 5/31/2018 5:19:00 PM

Thank you so much, Kim, I appreciate your support. John

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/31/2018 3:36:00 PM

A lovely romantic verse John, congratulations. Tom

John Gondolf
Date: 5/31/2018 5:15:00 PM

Thanks so much, Tom, I appreciate it. John

Winged Warrior

Date: 5/31/2018 9:24:00 AM

You do her proud, John...great trochee...love and light...^WW^

John Gondolf
Date: 5/31/2018 11:04:00 AM

Thanks, WW, I appreciate it. John

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/29/2018 6:27:00 PM

wow, you showcased my form PERFECTLY, John!!! Not many people do it right with the meter, so I appreciate this so much. Also, I love poems about the moon. And this hot poem gets a fave!

John Gondolf
Date: 5/29/2018 9:09:00 PM

Thanks so much, Andrea, I’m pleased that I was able to do your form justice and I’m so happy that you liked it. I appreciate your support. John

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/29/2018 5:08:00 PM

A beautiful love poem, John. I like the idea of having a moonlit wedding in June. And I enjoyed the form as well, especially the rhymes within lines. A lovely rhythm is created by the alternating stresses. Well done! Hugs, Carolyn

John Gondolf
Date: 5/29/2018 8:56:00 PM

Thank you so much, Carolyn, I appreciate your comments and I’m glad you enjoyed the poem. John

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/29/2018 10:25:00 AM

A joy to read. I'm just learning about stressed and unstressed and feel it here. Love the poem and the form.

John Gondolf
Date: 5/29/2018 12:45:00 PM

Thanks, Susan, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I just started paying close attention to the meter about 5 months ago. I think a poem flows much better and is easier to read if you stick to a set meter. John

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/29/2018 9:02:00 AM

Very nice John. A beautiful, peaceful poem to read :)

John Gondolf
Date: 5/29/2018 9:11:00 AM

Thank you so much, Heidi, I'm glad you enjoyed it. John

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 5/29/2018 8:14:00 AM

Honored to be the first to comment on this well written beauty. So much love here in these words. It is awesome. I also like the form. The rhyme scheme flows well. Have a great week, my friend.

John Gondolf
Date: 5/29/2018 8:38:00 AM

Thank you, Rhoda, I appreciate your support. John

Looking At the Moon

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