Look At Who You Are

Coming out of your dark
It is no place for me
Filled with anger and hatered 
With me as your mark
How sad of a soul you turned out to be
With all the gifts that you had
The equation ended with a pompous cad
It isn't to late to trust in the Lord
Let him be the might in your sword
God Bless

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Date: 1/3/2021 12:07:00 PM
I feel the pain you express in this poem. I love that you do not let the darkness swallow you up but instead offer out a chance of redemption for that angry tortured soul. Hugs, -C
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Date: 3/24/2015 4:02:00 PM
Nice poem, I too often try not to look at who I am, for I don't see the person for who others see, and say I am. I like this poem a lot, and I also know about betrayal from friends all too well..
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Ninette Carey
Date: 3/24/2015 4:13:00 PM
Please may I ask that you read my Bio... As to better understand my poetry...... I read you other comments.. Let me just say.... That I stand for all that is good... I will not surrender or go down with out a fight.... Please come join me.... It is good vs evil/selfishness
Date: 1/10/2015 6:20:00 PM
Ninette, I am sorry. My comments were not meant as criticism. I was only trying to help. There is simply nothing wrong with your poem. It is an excellent one. A few years ago, I didn't know one poetic form from another. A poet friend helped me learn, and I was simply trying to pass the favor on. So sorry it was misunderstood. I hope you will accept my apology.
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Date: 1/7/2015 10:21:00 AM
A concrete poem is one in which the words of the poem form the shape of the subject. For instance, in "Egg Money" the words form the shape of an egg. See also the shoe shaped poem, "Don't Walk on Me." You have expressed yourself well, and your rhyme is good.
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Ninette Carey
Date: 1/9/2015 7:13:00 AM
Cona... Thank you,, for educating me... I am new to this... I used the word.. concrete.. To mean...a literal statement.... Please feel free to teach me along the way.... Xo
Date: 12/29/2014 3:00:00 PM
It is best to avoid people like this. You have expressed yourself well.
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Ninette Carey
Date: 12/29/2014 7:03:00 PM
Something's in life are not about personal choice.... But about doing what's right for mankind!! It is just sad that we have been put in this position!!! Xo
Date: 12/28/2014 7:22:00 PM
I'm a reader of your poem now.A good poem that I enjoyed well.Wishes. -Safa
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Date: 12/28/2014 7:05:00 PM
A deep sad write - Betrayal by friend is so hard to deal with:-) I do hope things improve for you Hugs jan xxx
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