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Long Forsaking

Faraway, across a widening Expanse of vacant fields, Dawns slated light is gradually Awaking; And too soon new Morn's stilled Indifference Determinedly steals Into the abstractions of my fitful Dreams, Where, deeply concealed, Many forgotten memories from days Since past - Ne'er once unto me unworthy... Although long be they in their Forsaking. Those languid days, that, lately, I quite often see and hear Crowding throughout my wandering Slumbers; Vivid recollections, interns of a Jumbled mind - for ages absent, Beginning now to inexplicably reappear; Insistent murmurings troubling - Troubling incessantly:- Unwelcomed guests from Yesteryear... Strange impositions, of a sorts, Burdening upon this weary soul, Which, encamped within my Dampened Spirits - Doth so unwittingly encumber!

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Robert Lindley

Date: 6/20/2018 10:27:00 AM

Your wondrous poetry sends my mind racing my friend. Such beauty,depth, images and strong messages within! Another gem to fav, yes a truly great one..

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/23/2017 6:02:00 PM

I may have mentioned this before, but your writing style really reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe's works... I loved the whole mood and atmosphere of this poem, John. Very, very well penned, as always... Indeed, the ghosts of our past are never far away...

John Fleming
Date: 9/24/2017 3:12:00 PM

Hello again, Kelly! Always so very nice to see you returning to visit my little corner of the "Soup"...how are you keeping? Good I hope! Thank you for the nice comments...the reference to Poe I take as a great compliment - who would not! So very pleasing to see you once more, Kelly...I shall make it my priority to peruse your own latest poems very soon. All my very warmest regards as ever. Your friend. :) john

Thvia Shetley

Date: 9/11/2017 12:06:00 PM

The last stanza just sums it all up perfectly. Wonderful!

John Fleming
Date: 9/12/2017 9:15:00 AM

Thank you, Thvia. Please be assured that you will always find a warm welcome here at my little corner of the great "Soup"! My very warmest regards, Thvia - Cheers! :) john

Pipping Stars

Date: 9/1/2017 6:16:00 AM

"unwittingly encumber" ... blew us a kiss ... this is mad poetry brother ... one of the best weve seen in a bit ... our eyes are just become ing keen to goods like these ... its all here man ... what contradictions lie in beautiful misery ... awesome right man ...

John Fleming
Date: 9/6/2017 9:09:00 AM

Thank you, Timothy, that is very decent of you to say so...your kind and generous comments are very much appreciated - Cheers! :) john

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 8/16/2017 8:59:00 AM

A beautiful read my friend. Wonderfully written.

John Fleming
Date: 8/17/2017 7:35:00 AM

Scott, always good to see you have paid me a visit...hope you are happy and well at this moment. Thanks for the kind comments - much appreciated! Will be repaying the visit very soon, Scott...till then - Cheers! My warmest regards. :) john

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 8/14/2017 8:53:00 PM

What a wonderment. Thank you for this pleasure in reading.

John Fleming
Date: 8/15/2017 2:24:00 PM

Thank you, Patricia...it is very much nice of you to say so. I will be reading some more of your poems at the very first opportunity. My very warmest regards! :) john

Niall Fulham

Date: 8/14/2017 1:29:00 PM

Hi John , your write is so well penned such a pleasure to read, I am looking forward to reading more of your works. Thank you for sharing your amazing talent ::)))

John Fleming
Date: 8/15/2017 2:22:00 PM

Niall, please allow me to thank you for your kind and generous comments, it is very decent of you - Much appreciated!! I will be revisiting your little corner of the "Soup" very soon...I do enjoy reading your poetry. My very warmest regards! :) john

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 8/12/2017 11:25:00 AM

This poem speaks so clearly to me my friend. The composition is breathtaking. I read over and over again. I even read it out loud because of how well it rolled off my tongue. Definitely a fav. I hope this comment finds you well. Thank you for your recent visit to my page. Like always I just love your brilliant poetry. You never disappoint. Sending positive energy your way. Lots Of Love, armand.

John Fleming
Date: 8/13/2017 3:57:00 AM

Armand, how wonderful to see you visiting again! You will always retain that extra special place here at my little corner of the great "Soup"--No one will ever be more welcome!! I most fervently pray you have found a little peace...and with it some well deserved contentment and happiness. All my very warmest regards and blessings, Armand. :) john P.s I am very pleased you enjoyed my little poem as much as you did--Your kind and generous comments have made all the hard work so very much worthwhile. Thank you, Armand!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/11/2017 11:59:00 AM

I can really relate to this fine poem, John. It perfectly describes the times I've been at peace when suddenly--there it comes, the unpleasant memory of something I thought I'd completely recovered from years before! Janice

John Fleming
Date: 8/13/2017 3:32:00 AM

Thanks, Janice -Your comments are spot on! I suppose the older we get it is only natural to gather a few recriminations and disappointments about us...It is all acquired baggage of a sorts. The trick is--not to let it keep you down! Just one more of the many reasons we all write poetry. Good to see you visiting again, Janice--My warmest regards - Cheers! :) john

Kathleen Kroll

Date: 8/11/2017 11:58:00 AM

This poem really spoke to me, John, especially the second stanza. Thank you for speaking so clearly what is in the darker recesses of my own mind. You are such a warm personality, I pray you take solace in what I am sure are many, many friendships and earned blessings.

John Fleming
Date: 8/12/2017 5:41:00 AM

Thank you, Kathy. Indeed the poem was written when I was, briefly, at somewhat of a low ebb...I suppose this happens now and again to most people throughout their lives. Much better now though - fully reinvigorated! Many thanks for visiting and leaving such nice comments, Kathy...and let us hope we will have the time and opportunity to both pen some more poetry very soon. All my very best, Kathy - Cheers! :) john

Becca Teagan

Date: 8/9/2017 3:36:00 PM

such a calming write... very lovely, John. How have you been?

John Fleming
Date: 8/10/2017 8:52:00 AM

Hello, Becca. So nice to see you putting in an appearance in my little corner of the "Soup"...thank you so very much! You are as welcome here as anyone at anytime! :) I have been very busy of late...I work the night shift at a Royal Mail Rail Terminal - It is pretty hectic! I am still writing, and have lots of unfinished poems to contend with...ah well...I will get them done in time! Once again - So very lovely to see you, Becca! My very warmest regards, and, of course, my very best wishes! :) john

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/8/2017 10:51:00 AM

john, wonderful fragmentations of dizzy musings... so nice to read you again!..huggs

John Fleming
Date: 8/10/2017 8:41:00 AM

Hello, Nette - So nice to see you again also! :) You always have been one of my most generous commentators...I will be forever grateful. I hope you are in excellent health, Nette; and that everything is going just the way you would want it right now. Many thanks for your visit and gracious comments...it is a great pleasure for me every time! My very warmest regards - and my very best wishes as always! :) john

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/6/2017 4:56:00 PM

Your choice of words is exceptional, John. So much of this spoke to me. There is an ethereal feel to it. Peace of mind is not always easy to find when yesterdays whisper.

John Fleming
Date: 8/7/2017 2:10:00 AM

Hello, Eileen. I must say that it is a great pleasure to know that you have made a visit to my little corner of the "Soup" once again...lovely to see you! Thank you, Eileen for taking the time to stop by and make such nice comments...it is very encouraging when the likes of yourself do so; I will be repaying you a visit very soon. All my warmest regards, Eileen - and my very best wishes as always! :) john

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/4/2017 7:13:00 PM

Exceptional in its revelations about life and personal battles therein. Closing stanza a perfect summation... A fav...

John Fleming
Date: 8/6/2017 3:44:00 AM

Hello, Robert. So good to see you visiting once again...always a pleasure to know you have called round! I am pleased you enjoyed the poem; many thanks for the kind comments...and the fave. My very warmest regards, Robert. Your friend. :) john

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/3/2017 2:40:00 PM

Well written, this is. :)

John Fleming
Date: 8/6/2017 3:40:00 AM

Thank you, Heidi. Your taking time to visit and comment is very much appreciated by me; glad you enjoyed the read. All the very best, Heidi - Cheers! :) john

Moon Flower

Date: 8/3/2017 12:39:00 AM

A piece that's being well-crafted through phrases of imagery. Wishing you the best!

John Fleming
Date: 8/3/2017 8:36:00 AM

Thank you, Moon Flower. And thank you for taking the time out to visit and comment...I can assure you it is very much appreciated! Much obliged - Cheers! :) john P.s Nice to become acquainted. :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/30/2017 8:49:00 PM

When it is quiet and still at night burdensome unresolved feelings flood the mind. It becomes so difficult to shut the mind off and insomnia loves that kind of atmosphere. I used to suffer from it but have been sleeping much better now I am over the bronchitis. I could relate very well to your creative words John. So nice to see you post again my friend: )

John Fleming
Date: 7/31/2017 1:13:00 PM

Thank you, Connie - So nice to see you visiting again! I am relieved to hear you are now over your illness and on the mend...nothing worse than being incapacitated. I will revisit your little corner of the "Soup" very soon...I am sure there must be lots for me to catch up with. My warmest regards as always, Connie. :) john

Agnes Krampe

Date: 7/28/2017 10:06:00 AM

Your poem evokes that uneasy feeling of fitful sleep troubled by intruding thoughts that are vaguely uncomfortable... great description of a sensation that is difficult to describe. Glad to read from you!

John Fleming
Date: 7/29/2017 4:47:00 AM

Thanks, Agnes...and thank you for using that lovely word "Fitful" amongst your comments; I have just included it in the poem - I think it works rather well! My very best regards, Agnes - Cheers! :) john

Afzal Nusker

Date: 7/26/2017 11:10:00 PM

Each phrase evokes subtle feelings. Awesome poem! I love this one, John.

John Fleming
Date: 7/27/2017 8:33:00 AM

Thanks, Afzal. Your kind comments are very much appreciated...always a real pleasure to hear from you. You are most welcome here at anytime my friend! My very best regards! :) john

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/19/2017 3:18:00 PM

This one is quite interesting, John. Trying to put your finger on a feeling that is not easy to express except through well described phrases of imagery as you have used here. I enjoy when you do shorter poems like this one! The length of it was perfect.

John Fleming
Date: 7/19/2017 7:27:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea. I have edited and re-edited it dozens of times over the last few weeks; I actually edited it again just after you kindly commented...added a couple of commas: feel rather like Oscar Wilde. :) My very warmest regards, Andrea...as always. :) john

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/19/2017 3:16:00 PM

well, hello my fellow turtle. Let me see what you have written this week!!

John Fleming
Date: 7/19/2017 7:23:00 PM

Hello, Andrea. Much obliged for the link you supplied on your excellent piece of writing - I am really rather proud of my new "Turtle" status! :) Lol!