Doris Culverhouse Poet Narrative

Long Cream Beaches

Walking, toes in the hot, scorching sand
skin roasting in the sun. Ouch!!
Broken shells cutting tender feet!! Ouch!
Cool salty water, roughly hitting my legs
Ahh! cool water soothing my skin
Cold, cold sneaky wave hit me from behind
Chill bumps creeping along my spine
Skinned knees and face plant
Where did that hard hitting wave go?
Further out the waves are not so forceful
Ahh!! Relaxing ebbing waves
That is what I came here to experience!

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Lynette Chachere June 4, 2010 at 12:17 PM ouch, but sounds like a blast! and a lot of beach fun. -Always&Forever Lynette

Andrea Dietrich June 4, 2010 at 9:34 AM this was full of imagery to make us FEEL the event. I really like that, Doris. Thanks for sharing this one! LUv, Andrea

Gail Blakeley June 3, 2010 at 1:23 PM Wait..lol..the roasting bugs were one poem back...sorry. I did enjoy your poem, which, I happend to be looking at now.

Gail Blakeley June 3, 2010 at 1:20 PM Hi Doris..I appreciate your comment on my poem. I find it SO amusing that in our park in florida...the occupants all live next door to each other up north...They are seldom out of sight. As to your poem..I suspect it "might" be of florida also...where else do the bugs get roasted ? ha ! I liked it !

Poet Destroyer A June 1, 2010 at 2:22 PM Flat out relaxing,sounds like the sun got you before the fun of the water. Or should I say the enjoyment made by the sun,ouch!! Love it, have a nice one,..pd..

Gert W. Knop June 1, 2010 at 4:36 AM This poem of yours brings back my memories to white sandy beaches of Vanuatu. My Haiku "Screwpine" was inspired by my pencil-drawing on my facebook-album showing part of "White Sands"on Efate Island, Vanuatu, with lots of screwpines casting shadows on the coral sand. Thank you for your kind comments and have a great week!....Gert

Jared Pickett June 1, 2010 at 12:07 AM I love the beach!!!! I want to be a beach bum with an A-frame house on a white sandy beach and wear only flip flops..... Good write my dear.....:JP]