Long Cream Beaches

Walking, toes in the hot, scorching sand
skin roasting in the sun. Ouch!!
Broken shells cutting tender feet!! Ouch!
Cool salty water, roughly hitting my legs
Ahh! cool water soothing my skin
Cold, cold sneaky wave hit me from behind
Chill bumps creeping along my spine
Skinned knees and face plant
Where did that hard hitting wave go?
Further out the waves are not so forceful
Ahh!! Relaxing ebbing waves
That is what I came here to experience!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 6/4/2010 12:17:00 PM
ouch, but sounds like a blast! and a lot of beach fun. -Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 6/4/2010 9:34:00 AM
this was full of imagery to make us FEEL the event. I really like that, Doris. Thanks for sharing this one! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 6/3/2010 1:23:00 PM
Wait..lol..the roasting bugs were one poem back...sorry. I did enjoy your poem, which, I happend to be looking at now.
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Date: 6/3/2010 1:20:00 PM
Hi Doris..I appreciate your comment on my poem. I find it SO amusing that in our park in florida...the occupants all live next door to each other up north...They are seldom out of sight. As to your poem..I suspect it "might" be of florida also...where else do the bugs get roasted ? ha ! I liked it !
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Date: 6/1/2010 2:22:00 PM
Flat out relaxing,sounds like the sun got you before the fun of the water. Or should I say the enjoyment made by the sun,ouch!! Love it, have a nice one,..pd..
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Date: 6/1/2010 4:36:00 AM
This poem of yours brings back my memories to white sandy beaches of Vanuatu. My Haiku "Screwpine" was inspired by my pencil-drawing on my facebook-album showing part of "White Sands"on Efate Island, Vanuatu, with lots of screwpines casting shadows on the coral sand. Thank you for your kind comments and have a great week!....Gert
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Date: 6/1/2010 12:07:00 AM
I love the beach!!!! I want to be a beach bum with an A-frame house on a white sandy beach and wear only flip flops..... Good write my dear.....:JP]
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