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2005 song for C.

You pull my strings, I'll fly so high You pull my strings, I'll touch the sky I can't go wrong as long as you love me You know I'm so in love with you. You whisper sweet things, sweet like the morning dew You whisper baby, I'm so in love with you I can't go wrong as long as you want me and That why I'm so in love with you. CHORUS: Take it from me , I love you so Take if from me , I'll never let you go. As sure as you love me, I can't go wrong You know im so in love with you. You give me sweet dreams, Then make them come true. Your loves like sweet cream, Your kisses too I won't go wrong when you say That you love me That why I'm so in love with you. CM7th / Adim/ Dmi 7th / G13. Chorus: Dmi 7th / A 7th / D7th-A / Gsus--GMaj

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Date: 9/21/2022 3:29:00 PM
Perfect, Robert. You, my man are such a talent! And a musician! I envy you but…I do applaud you, you romantic soul. Hugs, Pangie xx
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Date: 8/8/2022 3:37:00 PM
instead of sweet cream....how about ambrosia, food of the gods....divinity combines candy as well as a hint of the Dine....build your vocabulary....read poets and learn how to steal lines
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Date: 8/4/2022 6:35:00 PM
may i also suggest the use of a thesaurus....the word "love" alone has so many other attributes, enchantment, passion, ardor, desire, besotted is a favorite of mine....great loves such as Cupid (Eros) and Psyche, the list is huge...read and your poetry grows...and you will love your labor in it all the more...welcome to the magic of romanticism
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Ray Zottola
Date: 8/7/2022 4:24:00 PM
Thank you for the critique. If you have a line suggestion pass it along. Im open to making it better.
Date: 8/4/2022 6:13:00 PM
i am with Robert on this one....lyrics....the lines continue to convey the love i see a need for some poetic metaphors....Bruno Mars has some great ones in his song Just The Way You Are...notice how he conveys one after another....it is a great dish you have written, just a bit more spice,
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Ray Zottola
Date: 8/7/2022 4:25:00 PM
As I told Robert, I appreciate the feedback. Any line suggestions?
Date: 8/4/2022 6:02:00 PM
A crisp charming purity. A professional song writer? Robert
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Ray Zottola
Date: 8/7/2022 4:27:00 PM
Not professional although I played in a doowop band for quite a while. Any suggestions?

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