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lonesome sometimes

on the lines of 'I’m So Lonesome I Could Cry
Song by Drifting Cowboys and Hank Williams'
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I'm So Lonesome, I Could Cry
Sitting by the window
On a creaky wooden chair
Light fine rain falling since daybreak
I can’t go out and play
I am not a child, I can’t play

Damp grains in the bird feeder 
Untouched water in bird bath
Not a bird in sight to watch
It is drizzling since yesterday
Lots of puddles by the tree
I can’t go stamping, I am not a child

Rain wet flowers sway
Fresh like kids after shower
Grass hold onto water drops
Tight like one on first date
I can’t go to collect those shiny
Raindrops lined up on wire, I can’t play

I sit there by the window
I can watch rain all day 
No one to disturb me here
No one to ask me out or in
My soul keeps me company, I am good
I’m so lonesome sometimes, I cry

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Mark Toney Date: 6/8/2025 5:33:00 PM Thriveni, thank you for supporting my Pop Up Poetry—From Vinyl to Verse (2) blog. Your poem is featured in the 'Results' blog, which is up and running. I love "It is drizzling since yesterday / Lots of puddles by the tree / I can't go stamping, I am not a child," and your repetition of "I can't play." Nicely done! Login to Reply thriveni c mysore Date: 6/10/2025 8:17:00 AM Ah! thank you so much for unique vinyl to verse challenge. I am glad you liked the write, Thank you so much dear poet. I am so honored to have my work displayed on the blog, Thank you for this joy. Thank you.

Gary Radice Date: 6/5/2025 5:22:00 AM thriveni, country music’s lyrics often tell stories and evoke emotions - as does your free verse here. There’s so much poignancy within your descriptive words. I like how you’ve cleverly structured your poem in a similar way to the Hank Williams song that you refer to. Cheers - Gary Login to Reply thriveni c mysore Date: 6/5/2025 6:42:00 AM I am so ignorant of English music dear poet. It is drizzling here, and I am indeed in rest due to knee pain. I tried to bring some childish plays to words and the way we feel when lonely dear poet. Your observations makes me 'tell all'. surprises me. Thank you so much for your precious time and kind visit. Thank you for today's joy.