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lonesome sometimes

on the lines of 'I’m So Lonesome I Could Cry Song by Drifting Cowboys and Hank Williams' --------------------------------------------------- I'm So Lonesome, I Could Cry Sitting by the window On a creaky wooden chair Light fine rain falling since daybreak I can’t go out and play I am not a child, I can’t play Damp grains in the bird feeder Untouched water in bird bath Not a bird in sight to watch It is drizzling since yesterday Lots of puddles by the tree I can’t go stamping, I am not a child Rain wet flowers sway Fresh like kids after shower Grass hold onto water drops Tight like one on first date I can’t go to collect those shiny Raindrops lined up on wire, I can’t play I sit there by the window I can watch rain all day No one to disturb me here No one to ask me out or in My soul keeps me company, I am good I’m so lonesome sometimes, I cry

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Date: 6/8/2025 5:33:00 PM
Thriveni, thank you for supporting my Pop Up Poetry—From Vinyl to Verse (2) blog. Your poem is featured in the 'Results' blog, which is up and running. I love "It is drizzling since yesterday / Lots of puddles by the tree / I can't go stamping, I am not a child," and your repetition of "I can't play." Nicely done!
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Date: 6/5/2025 5:22:00 AM
thriveni, country music’s lyrics often tell stories and evoke emotions - as does your free verse here. There’s so much poignancy within your descriptive words. I like how you’ve cleverly structured your poem in a similar way to the Hank Williams song that you refer to. Cheers - Gary
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Date: 6/5/2025 6:42:00 AM
I am so ignorant of English music dear poet. It is drizzling here, and I am indeed in rest due to knee pain. I tried to bring some childish plays to words and the way we feel when lonely dear poet. Your observations makes me 'tell all'. surprises me. Thank you so much for your precious time and kind visit. Thank you for today's joy.

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