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lonely fate endured

single gull struts sand outcast from the feathered flock -- lonely fate endured * For Rick's Nature Haiku contest

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/27/2011 10:51:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in ^RICK's "One Haiku" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Elaine George

Date: 6/26/2011 12:58:00 AM

A very touching Haiku, Carolyn. Many congrats on your SUPER WIN. Lainie

gautami phookan

Date: 6/26/2011 12:29:00 AM

A fine piece,, so impressive!!Carolyn Congrats on your win. love, gautami

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/25/2011 5:28:00 PM

Sadness flows from this one..Congrats..Sara

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet

Date: 6/25/2011 12:53:00 PM

Congrat on your 5th.place win to.Teresa

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet

Date: 6/25/2011 12:50:00 PM

Fabulous read Carolyn how did the MRI turn out.Let me know if your ok.~LOTS OF LUV~Teresa

daver austin

Date: 6/25/2011 10:50:00 AM

First! How are you doing? Thinking good thoughts about you. The gull is my favorite bird - such a flyer, such a swimmer! So beautiful. Yes! Though gulls usually have company, there is something so lonely and forlorn in their cry. Rick should love this one. LOve, daver

Robert Ball

Date: 6/25/2011 7:17:00 AM

Carolyn, I loved your poem. At least your not like any other poets I've ever read, I do a style but you do all styles, but, I'm fine, and the Lord has blessed me with a lot of things in my life, and now maybe, another. How is our treatment going? Hopefully with prayers we with the Lord's help will come out of this all right, I say we because I'm their in Spirit if nothing else. God bless and keep your chin up and believe that God will do His mighty will.

kash poet

Date: 6/25/2011 6:04:00 AM

Excellent Haiku Carolyn.Congratulations on your win,visit me.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/25/2011 5:28:00 AM

[re title have you seen last line used as well as first? let me know!] Lines 1 & 2 are great! you need a cut which is not the poet telling the reader how to feel also past tense is never used in haiku, give a sensory input on line 3. BIG hugs

Gert W. Knop

Date: 6/25/2011 3:55:00 AM

Dear Carolyn, my congrats too for your well deserved win! I'll pray for your health1...Love, Gert

kabuteng P.iNk k.

Date: 6/24/2011 10:54:00 PM

This sure gives such a sad image, Carolyn but very effectively written-- super congrats on your win :) hugs and have a good weekend!

nette onclaud

Date: 6/24/2011 10:16:00 PM

congrats on your great win, carols. .. how poignant! :) huggs

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 6/24/2011 10:06:00 PM

Well done, Carolyn! Good luck in the contest. Got your email about your MRI results. I do hope and pray the physical therapy will improve your condition. Take care. Love, Caroline.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/24/2011 9:03:00 PM

This one paints a sad picture of that lonely gull. Congrats, Carolyn. I don't think I had ever seen this gem before.

cory long

Date: 6/24/2011 6:57:00 PM

this was great good luck in the contest. cory

jack horne

Date: 6/24/2011 2:28:00 PM

Beautiful but sad write, my friend. My mother feeds a seagull with a gammy leg here - it seems to be an outcast.

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 6/24/2011 2:09:00 PM

Very nice entry Carloyn, and just read your blog, and my prayers go out to you for a fast recovery..luv Michael

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/24/2011 2:03:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your creative work..Reads like a winner to me..Good luck in the contest..There are some very exceptional works so far..Sara