Lonely

fog embraces me
with infinite tenderness
rain falls in my heart
the soul pulls the mantle close
life can be a soft grey sleep

4/8/2017
For contest: Tanka
sponsored by Rick Parise

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Line Gauthier

July 24, 2018 at 10:58 PM

Well penned, Agnes.

Paul Callus

April 10, 2017 at 9:36 AM

Truly beautiful, Agnes, especially the last two lines! #7 Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

April 9, 2017 at 8:40 PM

Oh, that last line just melds with the rest of your lines so beautifully. Very nicely done!

Anne-Marie Coreggia

April 9, 2017 at 3:48 PM

The images are so tender and exquisite that you can see and feel the soul pulling the 'mantle' gently over as the heart is lulled into a gentle 'grey sleep':) A 7 Amitiés

Agnes Krampe

April 9, 2017 at 8:07 PM

Thank you for your kind comments, Anne-Marie.