Beryl Edmonds Poet Rhyme

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Lonely

Lonely
When wandering alone away from crowds
I find it most soothing watching high clouds
Fascinating as they meander by
An outdoorsy movie held in the sky.

Only the lonely discern why we cry
We're sadly lonesome is the reason why
It’s well known that puffy eyed clouds cry too
They cry because desolated folk do.

Once upon a high cloud I was dreaming 
Faraway from swarms of folk appearing 
A dazzling castle was there on the cloud
With music and dancing, tears disallowed.

Over the rainbow Prince Charming came by
To claim his Princess right there in the sky
Venus the bright shining Goddess of love
Waved her magic dust o’er the night for us.

Angels came from somewhere, it was so grand
Dancing to an entranced castle dance band
We waltzed in the moonlight amongst the stars
Did a galaxy jig with planet Mars.

Too soon we were out of allotted time
At stroke of midnight bells began to chime
My Prince then got down on his bended knee
And began sweetly proposing to me.

Suddenly there was an almighty flash
The cloud it crashed and the castle collapsed 
My dream disappeared into forever
Flown off to the land of Never, Never.

I woke to find myself sad and lonely
My dream cloud had been only boloney.
15th September 2021

''L'' Contest New or Old Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Constance La France 

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Silpika Kalita October 11, 2021 at 11:29 AM Dear Belle, an exquisite write up on the allegory of the Rem Sleep. Even dream can make one feel lonely, how beautiful is the spontaneity! Universal theme! Heartiest congratulations and best wishes. Beryl Edmonds October 11, 2021 at 4:29 PM Thank you so much Silpika, those words mean a lot and mist gratefully received… Belle

Jennifer Proxenos September 24, 2021 at 7:19 AM Hey Belle, such an awesome write -whimsical and starry and heartfelt, yet a little lonely - but your prince charming is waiting in the wings, for the time to be just right! Congratulations on your wonderful win my friend. Hugs, Blessings, Jennifer. Beryl Edmonds September 24, 2021 at 3:15 PM Hi Jennifer, no one would be lonely if they knew their one and only was was waiting in the wings. Thank you, Belle

Constance La France September 22, 2021 at 10:01 AM Belle, congratulations on your win in my L contest with your wonderful poem, splendid writing ~ love and serenity _Constance Beryl Edmonds September 22, 2021 at 4:43 PM Thank you Constance, I enjoyed the challenge of your contest and am delighted with the placement … Belle

Rama Balasubramanian September 22, 2021 at 6:52 AM Loved the way you described clouds .....An outdoorsy movie held in the sky..... Wonderful story kept me glued till end. Reminded me of cindrella and her dance. Congratulations on your well deserved win Beryl Edmonds September 22, 2021 at 4:42 PM Thank you so much Rama, I do enjoy fantasy poetry, reading or writing. All the best, Belle

Sam Kauffman September 21, 2021 at 10:24 AM Lost in the reverie of ever changing clouds Belle! This experience is so well penned. Poignant story for each cloud with a pensive, melancholy ending of being alone again. Well done. Congratulations for your win! Sending you blessings. Beryl Edmonds September 21, 2021 at 5:32 PM Thank you so much Sam, comments truly appreciated… Belle

Paula Goldsmith September 18, 2021 at 10:46 AM Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write and picture. Love This One and The Ending. (My dream cloud had been only boloney.) Have a blessed day/weekend with your win............... Beryl Edmonds September 18, 2021 at 5:21 PM Thank you very much Paula, so pleased you enjoyed the poem and liked the ending line. Enjoy the rest of the weekend. Blessings, Belle

Alexis Y. September 18, 2021 at 7:20 AM Hi Belle, This is a good take on the contest theme. A well-written fairy tale with an unhappy ending. Congratulations on a well-deserved win:-) Alexis Beryl Edmonds September 18, 2021 at 5:18 PM Hi Alexis, I do enjoy writing of dreams and fairy tales, so I’m pleased this poem got a placement in Constance’s contest. Thank you, Belle

Lindsay Laurie September 17, 2021 at 5:39 PM Hello Belle ... dreams take us to a perfect world as long as they don't transform into a nightmare. It's the waking up that destroys us and the loneliness remains - thank you Belle - Lindsay Beryl Edmonds September 17, 2021 at 7:01 PM Thank you Lindsay, dreams do take us to beautiful places and then we wake up. This was a fictional write on loneliness, can’t say I’ve ever been lonely, I feel for those who have. Blessings, Belle

Jan Allison September 17, 2021 at 3:33 PM what a wonderful story Belle, many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx Beryl Edmonds September 17, 2021 at 3:40 PM Thank you so much Jan, hugs to you too… Belle :-) xx

Joanna Daniel September 17, 2021 at 1:56 AM Awesome fairy tale, Belle, congratulations:) Beryl Edmonds September 17, 2021 at 2:50 AM Thank you very much Jo… Belle

Christuraj Alex September 16, 2021 at 10:13 AM "Only the lonely discern why we cry We're sadly lonesome is the reason why It’s well known that puffy eyed clouds cry too They cry because desolated folk do." Beautiful Work. Congratulations! Beryl Edmonds September 16, 2021 at 10:27 AM Thank you so much Christuraj, you’ve just made my day… Belle

Tom Cunningham September 15, 2021 at 12:12 PM Great storytelling Belle, enjoyed your fairytale. Best of luck in the contest. Tom Beryl Edmonds September 15, 2021 at 4:20 PM Pleased that you enjoyed the read Tom, thank you very much… Belle

Darlene De Beaulieu September 15, 2021 at 11:38 AM Hello Belle, good to know you found the cloud behind you. it is a beautiful poem. blessings my friend. enjoy your day. Darlene De Beaulieu September 17, 2021 at 11:41 AM Hello Belle the last line of your poem made me laugh. Glad tat the cloud disappeared. I am making this my fav. Enjoy your day my friend. Hugs. Beryl Edmonds September 15, 2021 at 4:18 PM Hi Darlene, the cloud disappeared completely, I have changed the last line. Pleased you liked the poem dear friend. Blessings always ~ Belle

Victor Buhagiar September 15, 2021 at 11:01 AM Great mixture of reality and fantasy. Loved your poem. Beryl Edmonds September 15, 2021 at 3:37 PM Thank you for that Victor, delighted you liked it… Belle

James Marshall Goff September 15, 2021 at 10:34 AM Nice work Belle, a not uncommon trajectory of many relationships, of this I am familiar, blessings, james Beryl Edmonds September 15, 2021 at 3:35 PM Thank you James, for the word trajectory also, a new one to me so I looked it up and now know the meaning… Belle