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Lonely When wandering alone away from crowds I find it most soothing watching high clouds Fascinating as they meander by An outdoorsy movie held in the sky. Only the lonely discern why we cry We're sadly lonesome is the reason why It’s well known that puffy eyed clouds cry too They cry because desolated folk do. Once upon a high cloud I was dreaming Faraway from swarms of folk appearing A dazzling castle was there on the cloud With music and dancing, tears disallowed. Over the rainbow Prince Charming came by To claim his Princess right there in the sky Venus the bright shining Goddess of love Waved her magic dust o’er the night for us. Angels came from somewhere, it was so grand Dancing to an entranced castle dance band We waltzed in the moonlight amongst the stars Did a galaxy jig with planet Mars. Too soon we were out of allotted time At stroke of midnight bells began to chime My Prince then got down on his bended knee And began sweetly proposing to me. Suddenly there was an almighty flash The cloud it crashed and the castle collapsed My dream disappeared into forever Flown off to the land of Never, Never. I woke to find myself sad and lonely My dream cloud had been only boloney. 15th September 2021 ''L'' Contest New or Old Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France * *

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Silpika Kalita

Date: 10/11/2021 11:29:00 AM

Dear Belle, an exquisite write up on the allegory of the Rem Sleep. Even dream can make one feel lonely, how beautiful is the spontaneity! Universal theme! Heartiest congratulations and best wishes.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 10/11/2021 4:29:00 PM

Thank you so much Silpika, those words mean a lot and mist gratefully received… Belle

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 9/24/2021 7:19:00 AM

Hey Belle, such an awesome write -whimsical and starry and heartfelt, yet a little lonely - but your prince charming is waiting in the wings, for the time to be just right! Congratulations on your wonderful win my friend. Hugs, Blessings, Jennifer.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/24/2021 3:15:00 PM

Hi Jennifer, no one would be lonely if they knew their one and only was was waiting in the wings. Thank you, Belle

Constance La France

Date: 9/22/2021 10:01:00 AM

Belle, congratulations on your win in my L contest with your wonderful poem, splendid writing ~ love and serenity _Constance

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/22/2021 4:43:00 PM

Thank you Constance, I enjoyed the challenge of your contest and am delighted with the placement … Belle

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 9/22/2021 6:52:00 AM

Loved the way you described clouds .....An outdoorsy movie held in the sky..... Wonderful story kept me glued till end. Reminded me of cindrella and her dance. Congratulations on your well deserved win

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/22/2021 4:42:00 PM

Thank you so much Rama, I do enjoy fantasy poetry, reading or writing. All the best, Belle

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/21/2021 10:24:00 AM

Lost in the reverie of ever changing clouds Belle! This experience is so well penned. Poignant story for each cloud with a pensive, melancholy ending of being alone again. Well done. Congratulations for your win! Sending you blessings.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/21/2021 5:32:00 PM

Thank you so much Sam, comments truly appreciated… Belle

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/18/2021 10:46:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write and picture. Love This One and The Ending. (My dream cloud had been only boloney.) Have a blessed day/weekend with your win...............

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/18/2021 5:21:00 PM

Thank you very much Paula, so pleased you enjoyed the poem and liked the ending line. Enjoy the rest of the weekend. Blessings, Belle

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/18/2021 7:20:00 AM

Hi Belle, This is a good take on the contest theme. A well-written fairy tale with an unhappy ending. Congratulations on a well-deserved win:-) Alexis

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/18/2021 5:18:00 PM

Hi Alexis, I do enjoy writing of dreams and fairy tales, so I’m pleased this poem got a placement in Constance’s contest. Thank you, Belle

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 9/17/2021 5:39:00 PM

Hello Belle ... dreams take us to a perfect world as long as they don't transform into a nightmare. It's the waking up that destroys us and the loneliness remains - thank you Belle - Lindsay

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/17/2021 7:01:00 PM

Thank you Lindsay, dreams do take us to beautiful places and then we wake up. This was a fictional write on loneliness, can’t say I’ve ever been lonely, I feel for those who have. Blessings, Belle

Jan Allison

Date: 9/17/2021 3:33:00 PM

what a wonderful story Belle, many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/17/2021 3:40:00 PM

Thank you so much Jan, hugs to you too… Belle :-) xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/17/2021 1:56:00 AM

Awesome fairy tale, Belle, congratulations:)

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/17/2021 2:50:00 AM

Thank you very much Jo… Belle

Christuraj Alex

Date: 9/16/2021 10:13:00 AM

"Only the lonely discern why we cry We're sadly lonesome is the reason why It’s well known that puffy eyed clouds cry too They cry because desolated folk do." Beautiful Work. Congratulations!

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/16/2021 10:27:00 AM

Thank you so much Christuraj, you’ve just made my day… Belle

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/15/2021 12:12:00 PM

Great storytelling Belle, enjoyed your fairytale. Best of luck in the contest. Tom

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/15/2021 4:20:00 PM

Pleased that you enjoyed the read Tom, thank you very much… Belle

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/15/2021 11:38:00 AM

Hello Belle, good to know you found the cloud behind you. it is a beautiful poem. blessings my friend. enjoy your day.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 9/17/2021 11:41:00 AM

Hello Belle the last line of your poem made me laugh. Glad tat the cloud disappeared. I am making this my fav. Enjoy your day my friend. Hugs.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/15/2021 4:18:00 PM

Hi Darlene, the cloud disappeared completely, I have changed the last line. Pleased you liked the poem dear friend. Blessings always ~ Belle

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/15/2021 11:01:00 AM

Great mixture of reality and fantasy. Loved your poem.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/15/2021 3:37:00 PM

Thank you for that Victor, delighted you liked it… Belle

James Marshall Goff

Date: 9/15/2021 10:34:00 AM

Nice work Belle, a not uncommon trajectory of many relationships, of this I am familiar, blessings, james

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/15/2021 3:35:00 PM

Thank you James, for the word trajectory also, a new one to me so I looked it up and now know the meaning… Belle