Loneliness Echoes In Silence

she sat there
in her brackish drab
watching rice fall
like blizzards of storms
from the depths
of the windowsill
that cradled her
like dreams
of love

orphaned at birth
she never knew
the pulse of heart
or the quickened breaths
that rise and fall
from the edges of happiness
as it undressed
all around her

innocence
always wore white
her perception 
within a mind
where darkness
lurked
through the confines
of blurry eyes

she'd never surrender
her given name
but she'd surrender
her worthless soul
to the weight of steel
as barrels pressed
against her lips
in death's kiss

no one really cared
no one really knew her
she hid beneath
the veil of loneliness
it was never lifted
not even on that fateful day

she lies on the hill
where all the lonely
people go
buried beneath
fresh piles of snow
that blend with rice
as the bell tolls again
in echoes of laughter
from the church halls
her silence
forever unheard


9/1/2019

Eleanor Rigby Who was she Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Jerry T Curtis
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Godwin Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 11:37 AM
Well done and so darn beautiful in imagery and feel. Your expressions are exquisitely poetic and deeply meaningful. Wow, Sandra! Love, CayCay
Adams Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 12:02 PM
thank you my sweet friend....just what i pulled from the song and what was written about the character, real or fictional still remains a mystery... hugs :)
Callus Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 9:05 AM
Wow! What an excellent take you have delivered re the Eleanor Rigby theme, Sandra! This is one of the very best I've read so far; a winner in my eyes! ~ Regards // paul
Adams Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 9:13 AM
Thank you Paul for your wonderful comment and vote of confidence this morning :) hugs
Green Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 8:52 AM
A fantastic offering for the contest. You have created a life for her that it as dark and dreary as the song portrays. What an incredible piece of writing.
Adams Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 9:04 AM
Thank you Chris I tried to imagine what the character would have been like from what I read and heard, this was my take on her life ... hugs
Pandit Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 8:33 AM
I like your song better than the original--you created a story that aptly speaks of any life that suffers like Eleanor Rigby..a splendid write in your usual articulate free verse..a TOP win for you, sandy.
Adams Avatar
September 2, 2019 at 8:52 AM
Thank you Vijay... I listened to the song while reading the lyrics then searched the meaning behind the song and this is what I came up with :) hugs
Krutsinger Avatar
September 1, 2019 at 10:16 PM
"she lies on the hill where all the lonely people go" - this is such a tragedy, and yet, happens daily, without most of us noticing at all. Well done!
Adams Avatar
September 1, 2019 at 10:50 PM
Thank you Caren I listened to the song... searched the meaning of the lyrics and came up with my thoughts on it :) hugs
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