Locked & Loaded Gun

Locked & Loaded Gun

My first time to have a 
locked and loaded gun
pointed at me was no fun,

It was by my sweet Hun.
He wanted my wedding ring 
and for me to run.

To this day, him I still shun.
Used to think of guns as a fun pun,
now I see why rabbits run!


Entry in First time contest.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Brown Avatar
June 28, 2010 at 9:40 AM
Congratulations Marie on your win in Joe Flach's contest "First Time". Love, Carol
White Avatar
June 23, 2010 at 3:00 AM
That's just crazy- run run run Congrats on the win Marie
Dietrich Avatar
June 22, 2010 at 8:06 PM
Just getting around to finally see all the winners. congrats on this one, Marie, A great topic you chose. LUv, Andrea
Brown Avatar
June 19, 2010 at 11:17 AM
Congratulations on your win in Joe Flach's contest "First Time" Marie. Love, Carol
Johnson Avatar
June 18, 2010 at 6:00 PM
congratulations on yuour hm. Love, Joyce
Devonshire Avatar
June 18, 2010 at 5:55 PM
Wow, I'd hate to have an experience like this one, Marie. Call me a rabbit -- I'd be running, too. Congratulations on your success in the contest. Love, Carolyn
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June 18, 2010 at 4:28 PM
Congrats Marie on your HM in Joe's contest.. with this wonderful write and win enjoy your special honor.. with luv from the "Sweetheart"
Dietrich Avatar
June 18, 2010 at 11:20 AM
OOO EEEE. What a great way to think of "first time" I had one pointed at me in a 7/11 where I was a cashier. But I was pretty sure I was gonna be ok. The fear factor is what makes it more effetive as a first time poem. thanks for your sweet soupmail. LUv, andrea
Belt Avatar
June 17, 2010 at 11:31 PM
Wow scary....A Great write tho....Good Luck in the contest....Larry
A   Avatar
June 17, 2010 at 11:09 PM
this is a nice idea for a lot of first time moment, enjoyed. good luck in the contest,..p.d.
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