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Local Draft Choice

Once lived an energetic lad in Montreal He was rather large, I would say, seven feet tall Tough as old shoe leather He did not care whether He played with varsity team basketball, at all. written July 23, 2021

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/23/2021 6:40:00 PM

A wonderful limerick that made me smile.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 7/23/2021 8:00:00 PM

Good. I'm glad you approved of this one!

Barbara Peckham

Date: 7/23/2021 1:36:00 PM

Clever and well-rhymed, but I think the meter needs some work. Hope you don't mind my saying so.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 7/23/2021 4:13:00 PM

I do not mind at all, Barbara. The syllable count is 12 12 6 6 12. Limericks require the same number of syllables in the 1st, 2nd, and 5th line, and the same number in lines 3 and 4. So, what would you recommend? I think the meter may depend on the inflection you give the lines. I don't know. Help??? Should the syllable count be compromised to get a smooth meter? Or not?