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Little Child's Milestone

the extended hands

of an excited mother -

a baby's first steps


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Writing Challenge 5, May 2019 Senryu Contest
Hosted by Dear Heart
Placed 2nd

babysenryu

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Angela Crabtree

December 3, 2020 at 5:36 PM

This brings back memories of my son when he first walked. Thank you :)

Paul Callus

December 4, 2020 at 12:48 PM

Glad you related to it, Angela:) Thank you. Regards // paul

Gershon Wolf

June 23, 2019 at 4:16 PM

Lovely image; worthy winner. Best wishes, Gershon

Paul Callus

June 24, 2019 at 4:17 PM

Thank you, Gershon; pleased you enjoyed it. Regards // paul

Carole Duet

June 12, 2019 at 12:54 PM

Turning something simple into something so beautiful: this poem! :D

Paul Callus

June 14, 2019 at 8:13 AM

Thank you, Carole. Many times beauty lies in simple things....and often people don't realize that! Enjoy the weekend. Regards // paul

Constance La France

June 10, 2019 at 11:09 AM

Paul congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful Senryu ~

Paul Callus

June 10, 2019 at 5:03 PM

Thank you for the podium finish, Constance! It's been a pleasure taking part in your contest (as always!). Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

June 8, 2019 at 6:15 AM

So lovely! Congratulations on your well deserved win, Paul ...

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 6:50 AM

Many thanks, Supraja. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

June 7, 2019 at 8:38 PM

You capture the magic of this exhilarating moment masterfully, Paul. The emotion of your vivid imagery is priceless. Congratulations on your worth win. Warmest wishes and hugs always, my dear friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 6:00 AM

Thank you dear Susan. Your lovely comments are much appreciated. Enjoy the weekend. Warm regards & hugs // paul

Brenda Chiri

June 7, 2019 at 4:34 PM

Ah brings back so many memories! What a lovely write Paul you describe how it feels to have your child take their first step and was able to make me feel it! Loved it Paul! ;)

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 5:50 AM

I am sure you have many lovely memories, Brenda...children and grandchildren have so much to offer us. Thank you for the visit and comments. ~ Warm regards // paul

Brenda Chiri

June 7, 2019 at 4:34 PM

Ah see it was a winner too! I should have known!;)

Jennifer Proxenos

June 7, 2019 at 2:11 PM

Congratulations Paul, whatever you write dear Paul is with thought and feeling and such empathy. Hugs and warm regards, Jennifer.

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 5:40 AM

You are both kind and generous, Jenny:) Thank you. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Jack Horne

June 6, 2019 at 3:16 PM

this is really lovely, Paul

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 5:37 AM

Thank you, Jack....all the best, my friend. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

June 4, 2019 at 6:29 PM

back with my congratuations and waiting for a new poem of yours!

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 5:27 AM

Thank you, Andrea. I've been busy entertaining a relative who's here on holiday...have had little 'me' time. Enjoy the rest of the weekend. // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

June 4, 2019 at 12:36 PM

Hi Paul, Such wonderful and evertrue moments captured in this write - a proud mother whose joy overflows - such beautiful words Paul, Warm regards an hugs, Jennifer.

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 5:25 AM

Thank you for your insightful, complimentary comments, Jenny. ~ Warm regards and hugs // paul

Harry Horsman

June 2, 2019 at 3:43 PM

Oh so lovely, i was there in australia, a couple of weeks ago, and saw one of my great daughters do exactly that..thanks Paul..

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 5:17 AM

You were at the right place at the right time, Harry! It's a joy watching the development of young children. Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau

June 2, 2019 at 12:09 PM

Well that image should always bring a smile. I love it! Exciting for both baby and Mama. These are so much harder to write than they look. That’s is why I was trying them. Hard to say so much with a tiny pallet. Good job!

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 5:15 AM

Thank you, Edlynn. Each moment is part of the bonding process. And yes, these short forms can be challenging, but eventually one catches on, as your attempts are already showing. ~ Best regards // paul

Silent One

June 2, 2019 at 7:47 AM

You did this very well.. You are a master of the short form..

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 4:36 AM

Thank you for the generous comments, S-1. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 1, 2019 at 4:14 PM

- A sweet picture of mother and child, Paul ... best wishes in the contest ) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 4:24 AM

Glad you found it to your liking, Anne-Lise:) Enjoy the weekend. Hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

June 1, 2019 at 2:20 PM

A lovely senryu, Paul! Best wishes for success in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus

June 9, 2019 at 4:19 AM

Thank you, Carolyn. Excuse the late reply, but hosting takes up a lot of time!! I'm not sure if this contest has been judged yet. ~ Hugs // paul

Swetha Vangaveti

June 1, 2019 at 7:22 AM

That's sweet :)

Paul Callus

June 1, 2019 at 9:42 AM

Thank you, Swetha; pleased you enjoyed it...thank you. Regards // paul

Daniel Turner

May 31, 2019 at 9:05 PM

Hey there Paul. Dad's can get excited too! For me, I remember laughing a lot. LOL I remember watching them fall straight legged on their butts and then sitting there deciding if they were going to cry or get up and try it again. Good stuff!

Paul Callus

June 1, 2019 at 9:42 AM

You are totally right, Danny!! We fathers too take pleasure in our children, partaking in both sad and happy moments. Thank you for a most pleasant visit, my friend. Regards // paul