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Listen To the Twilight

Shhh....       Let us listen to the sun go down........

Here, take my hand, don't say a word,  
as the day says one last farewell
Evening shadows softly dwell, as purple fades to gray

Let us listen, ever closely,  to what the moon will say

Hold my hand, and come with me
It will take your breath away

We can watch the sun kneel slowly, as if in evening prayer
The flowers folding petals, and birds tuck heads beneath their wings
The daytime weary creatures, have gone to nest and lair
While twilight paints it's canvas wide with brilliant crimson flair


Be witness to the fire that grows so vast and wide
Then listen very closely, to what the stars confide
It is all about us slipping, into realms of blissful sleeping
While twilight paints it's canvas, wide and sweeping 

Let's be witness to the fire that smolders until it's gone
Time suspends this moment, in a fragile voice of song

We'll see the faintest trace of moon begin to climb
So gently, watch the dark erase the light
Enclosing us within the voice of night

Shh.... let us listen to the weary sun go down........  

Listen ever closely, to what the moon will say                
        Listen, as this day must slip away

                                                               Shhhh…….

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For the "Shush......Did you hear that?"  Contest
Sponsored by Anthony Slausen
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Gauthier Avatar
September 23, 2018 at 11:11 PM
Congrats on your well deserved win, Carrie. Lovely.
Messina Avatar
September 22, 2018 at 10:48 AM
Beautiful, Carrie, Great imagery and some truly wonderful lines. Many Congrats to you on your well deserved win in the contest. ~Charlie
Haight Avatar
September 21, 2018 at 9:06 PM
Oh, so beautiful, Carrie, and the Pantoum form makes it sing the lovely imagery you present in your words in praise of twilight in all its splendor. Congratulations on your well-deserved Podium win! Hugs, Sandra
Arnone Avatar
September 26, 2016 at 11:05 AM
Beautiful pantoum, Carrie. My favorite line, "All the daytime weary creatures, have gone to nest and lair." Congrats! :-)
Allison Avatar
September 25, 2016 at 3:14 PM
Such wonderful imagery Carrie many congrats:-) hugs jan xx
Scars Avatar
September 25, 2016 at 11:34 AM
Sweet Carrie..."watch the dark erase the night"....so beautiful, loved this one :) congratulations on your placement! :)-luloo
Krampe Avatar
September 25, 2016 at 3:33 AM
Beautiful, Carrie. I love your idea of *listening* to the sun setting. My favorite line is "While the evening shadows tiptoe to the cricket's slippered sounds". Congrats on your placement. Agnes
Haight Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 8:55 PM
Such a lovely Pantoum, Carrie. Very peaceful and perfect for the twilight theme. Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra
Turner Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 7:46 PM
Not sure how I missed this one but Congratulations Mrs Carrie on your placement. It is such a peaceful time. I love listening to the crickets, frogs and the night birds.
Negron Flores Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 3:45 PM
Congratulations Carrie on the placement of the contest.
A  Avatar
August 20, 2013 at 9:21 PM
Hi Carrie, .congrats... love ~SKAT~ :)
A   Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 5:15 PM
Carrie, a beautiful sunset poem ... congratulations!! PD
Hamilton Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 4:10 PM
oh Carrie you have written a beautiful poem congrats on your win Shadow x smile
May Avatar
August 18, 2013 at 9:23 AM
wow....beautiful... "While the evening shadows tiptoe to the crickets slippery sound"..I just love that line...congrats on a great win Carrie
Lamoureux Avatar
August 18, 2013 at 8:57 AM
I enjoyed this sunset and your slippered Crickets! Congratulations.
Gasun Avatar
August 18, 2013 at 5:35 AM
Congratulations on your win my dear friend Carrie. Thank you so much for your very spectacular and outstanding poem. I love it so much and so enjoyed. How I wish you've written your name at the bottom of your poem as included in my rules. Anyway, I consider this as one of my best entries.Thank you so much as well for your full support and everythin. Have a blessed day! Big hugs! Love lots, Leonora
Sweetheart Avatar
September 23, 2010 at 8:57 AM
Congrats Carrie on your HM in the Pantoum contest.. a beautiful write and lovely honor for u to enjoy with luv...
Devonshire Avatar
September 23, 2010 at 8:41 AM
Thankfully, I don't have to "eat doo-doo and die" as I pledged I would if this poem hadn't placed, Carrie. Congratulations on your success in Jared's contest! Love, Carolyn
Dietrich Avatar
September 9, 2010 at 4:33 PM
carrie, an EXCELLENT title for this wondrous poem of yours. This is HOW a pantoum was meant to be. Repeating lines meant to make us FEEL something. IN this case, the tranquility and beauty of this time of day. If this doesn't place high, there is no justice. LUv, Andrea
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September 5, 2010 at 4:48 AM
What a lovely serene beauty is flowing in this sweetly sketched Poem with so lovely a description of the diminishing Sun and silently emerging shadows. Great write my friend. My good wishes for your contest. Love and best wishes always....Ravindra...Carrie Richards
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August 28, 2010 at 7:59 AM
Beautiful scene you give us here... good luck. Michael
Mehta Avatar
August 28, 2010 at 4:14 AM
Wonderful peicture you have created of the sunset time, carrie. Good luck in the contest
Culverhouse Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 7:32 PM
great write...I can here the bugs and frogs singing. The sun seems to say---yaaaawwwnnnnn....
Devonshire Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 6:11 PM
Truly a masterpiece of imagery, Carrie! And you worked so well with a form I find very difficult. How did you do it? I like the idea of not only watching, but "listening" to the sun going down. It seems to have sprung so smoothly from your pen. If this isn't a winner, I'll eat doo-doo and die. LOL Love, Carolyn
Sweetheart Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 6:02 PM
A breathtakingly beautiful piece Carrie.. good luck in Jared's contest ... enjoy a happy weekend..with luv..
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