Barbara Gorelick Poet Tail-rhyme

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Walking toward the distant light
How cold it is, this summer night
Broken dreams..
This band about my heart so tight
Now for each breath I seem to fight
Night bird screams..


For Brian's contest

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Debbie Guzzi June 27, 2011 at 5:12 PM Good entry I think he will really like it. I have to look up this form?[the last line really wraps it up nice.] Light & Love

Debbie Guzzi June 27, 2011 at 5:12 PM Good entry I think he will really like it. I have to look up this form?[the last line really wraps it up nice.] Light & Love

Leo Larry Amadore June 8, 2011 at 8:07 AM A biting, keenly honed short piece...emotionally affective and concisely written and conceived...very well-conceived ending line...good.

Carrie Richards June 8, 2011 at 7:01 AM I hope this is simply an expression of poetry....nothing of true anxiety really happening to inspire this one:) A feeling we have all had at one time or another. Well done, Barbara!

Dr.Ram Mehta June 8, 2011 at 6:43 AM Beautifully written on the broken dreams, Good luck in the contest, Barbara