Lirazel's Ear

Her hair
windy willows
flowing feverishly
a shuddering child at her feet
loves dreams
5/27/2017
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Callus Avatar
June 3, 2017 at 9:46 AM
A lovely poem that can lead to a realm of enchantment, John. Congratulations on a deserved win. Regards // paul
Wood Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 8:17 AM
Confused. Is the child ill? Well done!
Beam Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 11:50 AM
Lirazel is the name of character from the book. The King of Elfland's Daughter but the poem is based on a scene, in Erlkönig is a poem by Johann Wolfgang von Goethe. The ErlKing Wilt go, then, dear infant, wilt go with me there? My daughters shall tend thee with sisterly care; My daughters by night their glad festival keep, They'll dance thee, and rock thee, and sing thee to sleep." "My father, my father, and don't you see there The Elf-king's daughters in the gloomy place?" "My son, my son, I see it clearly: There shimmer the old willows so grey."
Poteet Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 6:46 AM
You leave me with a negative image of modern motherhood, my hope for the child is pleasant dreams. Well done, congratulations.
Beam Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 11:52 AM
Thank You very much R. A. P.
Poteet Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 6:45 AM
You leave me with a negative image of modern motherhood, my hope for the child is pleasant dreams. Well done, congratulations.
Inman Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 1:50 AM
Very imaginative write John, dream like.
Beam Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 5:13 AM
Thanks James and congratulations to you also. I hope I got the double entendre across, using feverishly as a turning word, that he might be dreaming or maybe nought.
Anderson Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 1:12 AM
Congratulations with your place in the Cinquain contest. A delightful poem that exemplifies what the form is about. Very nice poem, well done. Cheers,
Beam Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 5:07 AM
Thanks, for placement and gracious comment, John
Dietrich Avatar
May 29, 2017 at 4:32 PM
wow, this is gorgeous. You have a talent with these short forms!
Beam Avatar
May 30, 2017 at 7:05 AM
Thanks you very much, for the kind words.
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