Robert Lindley Poet Sonnet

Like Shadows In My Tired Mind

Like Shadows In My Tired Mind

Like shadows in my tired mind
you danced in wisps of cool breeze.
Your deep treasure I did find
yet you left me with such ease.
I had found thorns on your rose
holes in your dancing shoes.
Large cuts on your pretty toes
dark truth in your bad news.

Like shadows in my tired mind
you danced in wisps of cool breeze.
Your deep treasure I did find
yet you left me with such ease.

Such ease, this heart deceit shattered.
To you- had it ever mattered?

Robert J. Lindley, 10-21-2016

Sonnet form (NEW)- Lin 678, rhyme( ababcdcd,abab,ee)
Eight verse stanza, rhyme ababcdcd, repeat first four verses as middle stanza abab, closing couple(ee) must be 8 syllables each, total syllable count must be 100.
Word count to be either 87 or 88..
Optional but better if it contains (8,4,2) that is 8 verses of seven syllables each, 4 verses of 8 syllables each, and two verses of 6 syllables each, as shown in this poem.
See syllable count below..
Enjoy the challenge of writing a sonnet in this form... trust me its not an easy task..

Poem Syllable Counter Results
Syllables Per Line: 7 8 7 7 7 6 7 6 0 7 8 7 7 0 8 8
Total # Syllables: 100
Total # Lines: 16 (Including empty lines)
Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: N/A
Total # Words: 88

p.s.- AS YOU CAN SEE,  I love math...

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Paul Callus October 21, 2016 at 4:07 PM Yours is a creative personalized sonnet, Robert. The repeated 2nd stanza is effective, and the end couplet is undoubtedly a fitting climax. Well done, and keep up the good work, my friend. Regards // paul Robert Lindley October 21, 2016 at 9:10 PM Thank you Paul. Your insightful comments are always appreciated as are the helpful tips I get when reading your poetry.

Robert Lindley October 21, 2016 at 11:18 AM I just finished another poem this fine morn, written for a new contest here, the one on - gems.. May post it later today or else tomorrow. IF I DO NOT FORGET. LOL