Like Fluid Tears Ebbing

Kohl is nightfall when bright hours decrease
Etching the silhouette of  trees ;
Beneath drooped willows,   grief ‘s  ache unravels
   A mourning in fallow shade
Twisted as  petals,  cold:

How  endings  throb again   again
Without  his blossoms for our sky;
   That  gushing out  into soft rain
Lamentation is my reply .
Murmurs of  branches 
   Deepen a caressing tune,
Allaying eve’s wail
Still, crystal  leaves  pour  on grounds
   Misty like fluid tears… ebbing.


4/21/2018
Broken Wings’ Contest:  It’s All About  Four
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Roper Avatar
May 1, 2018 at 8:31 PM
Nette, beautiful imagery {:~) congratulations on your placement Hugs Eve ~`*
Crisci Avatar
May 1, 2018 at 7:05 PM
Hi, Nette. Thank you for your kind comment.You still captivate me with your enchanting verses. Congratulations on your first place in Broken Wings' contest. Your poetry is top-notch as always. Keep up the great work. :) God loves you. Hugs, Andrew.
Dietrich Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 5:56 PM
Outstanding imagery , Nette, in your awesome winning poem. Congrats.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 1:16 PM
Those first two lines are wonderful! Congrats, Nette!
La France Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 8:38 AM
Nette, CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest with this beautifully sad poem, you really poured out your emotions and your words touched my heart deeply. I like how you connected the forms to create a perfect smooth poem. Well done.
Inman Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 7:41 AM
Your first word jumped out at me Nette, and I must admit I had to look it up, clever usage. A wonderful poem.
Gentry Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 1:47 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win. An excellent unique take on the form... I like this, was seamless. Well done.
Sinha-Roy Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 1:01 AM
Congratulations, Nette on you top position win.
Gauthier Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 10:23 PM
Congrats, nette, on your top win.
Thomas Avatar
April 26, 2018 at 6:08 PM
Your poems have always been beautifully unique Nette. They're still breathtaking :)
Dietrich Avatar
April 22, 2018 at 1:21 PM
amazing how you fit the lines all together to make it flow as if it were a free verse and not a combination of the four forms we were given to use. Splendid imagery.
Pandit Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 7:02 AM
Enjoyed reading this articulate poem adorned in imagery. Impressive lines like...Etching the silhouette of trees ...and ..Murmurs of branches. Best for a win, nette.
Ongado Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 1:24 AM
Somber in tone; brilliant in imagery!
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