Like Fluid Tears Ebbing

Kohl is nightfall when bright hours decrease
Etching the silhouette of  trees ;
Beneath drooped willows,   grief ‘s  ache unravels
   A mourning in fallow shade
Twisted as  petals,  cold:

How  endings  throb again   again
Without  his blossoms for our sky;
   That  gushing out  into soft rain
Lamentation is my reply .
Murmurs of  branches 
   Deepen a caressing tune,
Allaying eve’s wail
Still, crystal  leaves  pour  on grounds
   Misty like fluid tears… ebbing.


4/21/2018
Broken Wings’ Contest:  It’s All About  Four

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 5/1/2018 8:31:00 PM
Nette, beautiful imagery {:~) congratulations on your placement Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 5/1/2018 7:05:00 PM
Hi, Nette. Thank you for your kind comment.You still captivate me with your enchanting verses. Congratulations on your first place in Broken Wings' contest. Your poetry is top-notch as always. Keep up the great work. :) God loves you. Hugs, Andrew.
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Date: 4/29/2018 5:56:00 PM
Outstanding imagery , Nette, in your awesome winning poem. Congrats.
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Date: 4/29/2018 1:16:00 PM
Those first two lines are wonderful! Congrats, Nette!
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Date: 4/29/2018 8:38:00 AM
Nette, CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest with this beautifully sad poem, you really poured out your emotions and your words touched my heart deeply. I like how you connected the forms to create a perfect smooth poem. Well done.
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Date: 4/29/2018 7:41:00 AM
Your first word jumped out at me Nette, and I must admit I had to look it up, clever usage. A wonderful poem.
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Date: 4/29/2018 1:47:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win. An excellent unique take on the form... I like this, was seamless. Well done.
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Date: 4/29/2018 1:01:00 AM
Congratulations, Nette on you top position win.
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Date: 4/28/2018 10:23:00 PM
Congrats, nette, on your top win.
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Date: 4/26/2018 6:08:00 PM
Your poems have always been beautifully unique Nette. They're still breathtaking :)
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Date: 4/22/2018 1:21:00 PM
amazing how you fit the lines all together to make it flow as if it were a free verse and not a combination of the four forms we were given to use. Splendid imagery.
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Date: 4/21/2018 7:02:00 AM
Enjoyed reading this articulate poem adorned in imagery. Impressive lines like...Etching the silhouette of trees ...and ..Murmurs of branches. Best for a win, nette.
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Date: 4/21/2018 1:24:00 AM
Somber in tone; brilliant in imagery!
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