Lightening Green

Brightening captivating greenish allure
Seasonal visitor like rain drops...
Leaving me always wanting some more...
Like Oliver Twist.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Babcock Avatar
December 4, 2010 at 8:19 AM
A cute write and you made me smile. Your writing is now getting witty. Good for you. Love mom
Dietrich Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 10:22 PM
by the way, that is a clever little "twist" you put at the end of this poem! Luv, Andrea
Dietrich Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 10:18 PM
soupmail, Charles
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December 1, 2010 at 11:41 AM
Oh, such a delightful poem, son. Remember what happened when Oliver asked for more? I can see the vibrant green plants bringing joy to your heart in this poem. Beautifully written, dear. Love, "mom"
Culverhouse Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 4:32 AM
Hey my friend, how are you? Hope you can write as much as you want. does the village have wireless internet? Do you teach the children? hope to talk soon.
Bloomsfield Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 2:16 AM
Who didn't love Oliver Twist?thanks for the memory,lovely poem!
Dietrich Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 9:13 PM
Hey, Charles. this is a fun little poem, comparing yourself to Oliver Twist. Sounds mystical! Luv, Andrea
Sweetheart Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 8:10 PM
Yes a classic Lightening Ink as Oliver Twist is.. wonderful and brilliant bright lines of your Senryu ..enjoyed tonight with luv..my friend..
Loving Iii Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 2:28 PM
good. jhl
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November 29, 2010 at 10:31 AM
Always, leaving me wanting more,,, lol,, I know some one who loves that line,, but he says,, more dots more dots.. Twist, weee.. sorry about that weee.. I love Oliver twist, by the way. OI' and I enjoyed this little write,.always your friend,..p.d.
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