Seren Roberts Poet Acrostic

Lifting the Fog

Listening, waiting, watching
Intently, wondering 
Focused, not daring to move
The little robin waits
Immobile, watching the gardener
Nothing stops his merry chirp
Going to enjoy breakfast

The fog of early morning
Heated  by the watery sun thins,
eating is a priority for robins short life

Fog of wondering is lifted
Only turned soil will supply worms
Gardener gets up early to provide



Penned 4/07/2014

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Poet Destroyer A July 23, 2014 at 4:41 PM Seren :) Thank you for the sweet reply, on my comment. I'm a little late, getting back to all the replies, left a while back. XOX ~LINDA~

Casarah Nance July 18, 2014 at 10:32 PM well done, I have a problem with puncuation too, I dig the poem though, good job :)

Poet Destroyer A July 18, 2014 at 2:29 PM Amazing, Seren....PD Seren Roberts July 18, 2014 at 9:02 PM Ty. Linda

Faye Gibson July 18, 2014 at 9:57 AM Seren, wonderful take on the phrase you chose. I love the metaphor for life here, too. Congratulations.

Richard Lamoureux July 18, 2014 at 9:10 AM This is so sweet, congratulations on your win.

Arlene Smith July 18, 2014 at 7:15 AM Beautiful, Seren! Congrats on a great win! Hugs.. Arlene

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 18, 2014 at 1:19 AM Very lovely write Seren! Congrats on win!

Andrea Dietrich July 17, 2014 at 11:55 PM Seren, this was an adorable poem. I placed lower the poems with little or no punctuation. I want to do my next contest something to do with punctuation because I am noticing many poets who are not using it, and maybe it's just me, but it is something I want to see more of! Congrats in my contest. You did the theme in a creative way. Seren Roberts July 18, 2014 at 12:45 AM lol point taken, looking at my poem I started using punctuation, what happened I don't know. Andrea thanks for placing me ...Seren

Emer Capate July 4, 2014 at 7:53 AM though "ROBIN" is not familiar here in the Philippines, your well defined scenario paints a picture in my mind... emer..keep writing Seren Seren Roberts July 4, 2014 at 8:22 PM Lovely pretty bird, puts a smile on most peoples faces. But can be a little fighter if another robin appears that isnt his mate...Seren

Tim Smith July 4, 2014 at 5:55 AM A beautiful acrostic Seren...The robin an image of spring and new things to come...waiting for the soil to be turned for nourishment..There is some nice meaning here...have a wonderful weekend.. hugs Tim Seren Roberts July 4, 2014 at 8:23 PM Hi Tim Yes the robin, reminds us of so much. His chirpy song is always welcomed.....Seren

Jadazzle United July 4, 2014 at 3:25 AM wonderful acrositc - I always smile when I see a robin in the garden its such a cheery bird - love the way they follow you round when you are gardening. Good luck in the contest. Hugs jan xx Seren Roberts July 4, 2014 at 8:20 PM yes but they can be really feisty when another crosses his path......Seren