Dr.Ram Mehta Poet Rhyme

Lifting the Fog

Sitting before the mountain bare
A single thread, the clear stream runs cold
Until the mists had cleared the air
And the grey peaks their heads unfold
White clean snow floating like a dream
Uncovering and flowing like cream.

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Date 12-23-13
Fifth Place win
Contest: One in Five by Andrea

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John Posey September 18, 2014 at 9:53 PM Supreme images used to create a winning entry..... Great work, Doctor..... Jake

Robin Davis April 22, 2014 at 8:07 AM Dr. Ram Such a descriptive and charming write. The imagery allows the reader to feel they are in this calm and serene scene with you. Thank you for the great comment on my Cupids Arrow poem.

Skat A February 11, 2014 at 7:02 PM Dr, good on the imagery... ~ Love ~ SKAT

Sara Kendrick January 19, 2014 at 3:05 PM This is awesome work!! No wonder it is in the winners’ list..Sara

Debbie Guzzi January 12, 2014 at 6:06 PM Very melodic! perhaps there's a better word than cream? Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Joseph May January 12, 2014 at 5:33 PM Congrats on a fine win Dr Ram

Donna Jones January 12, 2014 at 3:44 PM Congratulations Dr Ram...very nicely written. .great images..

Roger Horsch January 12, 2014 at 11:25 AM Avery well written poem Dr Ram, congrats on your win.

Richard Lamoureux January 12, 2014 at 10:29 AM Great imagery, congratulations Dr. Ram

Andrea Dietrich January 11, 2014 at 9:27 PM dr. Ram, I almost put this lower because you mixed past tense into the third line by using had instead of have. However, your interesting imagery was so awesome to me. I just loved the last two lines of this. Gosh, I loved the first part too. I could just picture the stream as a thread of water! Congrats on your win in my contest.

Cole Banner January 10, 2014 at 8:13 AM Good job on this one....

Sandra Adams December 27, 2013 at 8:16 PM you paint a beautiful image with your words...i picked this one because of your title, the poem did not disappoint.. enjoyed the read!

Dr. Vandana Sharma December 27, 2013 at 4:47 AM a few words but so many depictions of wonderful nature

Sarai Virden December 26, 2013 at 3:40 AM Very beautiful piece Dr. Ram

Donna Jones December 25, 2013 at 7:55 PM Love the title mixing with the mountain stream by the mountain...beautiful picture Dr Ram...

John Beam December 24, 2013 at 6:08 PM A great image you have painted thanks for sharing Dr.Ram Mehta December 24, 2013 at 8:58 PM Thanks

Linda Jackson December 24, 2013 at 3:50 PM I like the imagery in your poem "white clean snow" - lovely. Have a Happy Christmas, best wishes from Linda (Lochcarron, Scotland) x Dr.Ram Mehta December 24, 2013 at 8:59 PM Thanks, Linda

Kathryn Collins December 24, 2013 at 12:02 PM Absolutely brilliant, Ram. Any comment would give it injustice. "The gray peaks their heads unfold" Astounding. love, Kathy Dr.Ram Mehta December 24, 2013 at 9:00 PM Thanks for the comments, Kathryn

Poet Destroyer A December 24, 2013 at 12:59 AM Dr RAm, Guess what? , The end of the year is approaching :) and there's no way I'm letting this year end, without dropping by with SMILES and CHRISTMAS CHEERS. Thank You for making this a great year for ALL OF US. --- May magic fill your days and all your dreams come true this holiday season. MERRY CHRISTAMS <3 Love Linda -The Sweetest Poet Destroyer

Debbie Guzzi December 23, 2013 at 6:36 PM Merry Christmas & Happy Holiday!, Light & Love Dr.Ram Mehta December 23, 2013 at 11:58 PM Merry Christmas and happy holidays, Deb, Light and Love

Eileen Manassian December 23, 2013 at 11:43 AM Beautiful, Dr Ram. Flowing...sweet and clear! :) I enjoyed this!!!

Litan Dey December 23, 2013 at 11:12 AM Sweet poems with snow, dream and cream...Enjoyed your rhyme dear.

Sara Kendrick December 23, 2013 at 9:07 AM Ahh!!! Great rhythm and flow to this one..Enjoyed reading it this morn..Reads like winning material to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Charmaine Chircop December 23, 2013 at 8:48 AM It is my pleasure to read your poetry..and I thankyou for it!!