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Lifting the Fog

Sitting before the mountain bare A single thread, the clear stream runs cold Until the mists had cleared the air And the grey peaks their heads unfold White clean snow floating like a dream Uncovering and flowing like cream. +++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Date 12-23-13 Fifth Place win Contest: One in Five by Andrea

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John Posey

Date: 9/18/2014 9:53:00 PM

Supreme images used to create a winning entry..... Great work, Doctor..... Jake

Robin Davis

Date: 4/22/2014 8:07:00 AM

Dr. Ram Such a descriptive and charming write. The imagery allows the reader to feel they are in this calm and serene scene with you. Thank you for the great comment on my Cupids Arrow poem.

Skat A

Date: 2/11/2014 7:02:00 PM

Dr, good on the imagery... ~ Love ~ SKAT

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/19/2014 3:05:00 PM

This is awesome work!! No wonder it is in the winners’ list..Sara

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/12/2014 6:06:00 PM

Very melodic! perhaps there's a better word than cream? Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Joseph May

Date: 1/12/2014 5:33:00 PM

Congrats on a fine win Dr Ram

Donna Jones

Date: 1/12/2014 3:44:00 PM

Congratulations Dr Ram...very nicely written. .great images..

Roger Horsch

Date: 1/12/2014 11:25:00 AM

Avery well written poem Dr Ram, congrats on your win.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/12/2014 10:29:00 AM

Great imagery, congratulations Dr. Ram

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/11/2014 9:27:00 PM

dr. Ram, I almost put this lower because you mixed past tense into the third line by using had instead of have. However, your interesting imagery was so awesome to me. I just loved the last two lines of this. Gosh, I loved the first part too. I could just picture the stream as a thread of water! Congrats on your win in my contest.

Cole Banner

Date: 1/10/2014 8:13:00 AM

Good job on this one....

Sandra Adams

Date: 12/27/2013 8:16:00 PM

you paint a beautiful image with your words...i picked this one because of your title, the poem did not disappoint.. enjoyed the read!

Vandana Sharma

Date: 12/27/2013 4:47:00 AM

a few words but so many depictions of wonderful nature

Sarai Virden

Date: 12/26/2013 3:40:00 AM

Very beautiful piece Dr. Ram

Donna Jones

Date: 12/25/2013 7:55:00 PM

Love the title mixing with the mountain stream by the mountain...beautiful picture Dr Ram...

John Beam

Date: 12/24/2013 6:08:00 PM

A great image you have painted thanks for sharing

Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 12/24/2013 8:58:00 PM

Thanks

Linda Jackson

Date: 12/24/2013 3:50:00 PM

I like the imagery in your poem "white clean snow" - lovely. Have a Happy Christmas, best wishes from Linda (Lochcarron, Scotland) x

Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 12/24/2013 8:59:00 PM

Thanks, Linda

Kathryn Collins

Date: 12/24/2013 12:02:00 PM

Absolutely brilliant, Ram. Any comment would give it injustice. "The gray peaks their heads unfold" Astounding. love, Kathy

Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 12/24/2013 9:00:00 PM

Thanks for the comments, Kathryn

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/24/2013 12:59:00 AM

Dr RAm, Guess what? , The end of the year is approaching :) and there's no way I'm letting this year end, without dropping by with SMILES and CHRISTMAS CHEERS. Thank You for making this a great year for ALL OF US. --- May magic fill your days and all your dreams come true this holiday season. MERRY CHRISTAMS <3 Love Linda -The Sweetest Poet Destroyer

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/23/2013 6:36:00 PM

Merry Christmas & Happy Holiday!, Light & Love

Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 12/23/2013 11:58:00 PM

Merry Christmas and happy holidays, Deb, Light and Love