Notes About The Poem

Life's Journey

Like a giant clock,
each of our lives is ticking,
ticking, and ticking away -
from the first hour that
we set foot on the road to
our final destination.

Our life’s morning is
beloved childhood and youth.
We can’t know what lies beyond
our road’s horizon
as we make our way into
the afternoon of our life.

Like a vast desert
lies the future far ahead
Alas! A few already
in the morning’s sun
have perished, as will others
before the late afternoon.

Many reach their end
as sun dips behind mountains.
Twilight years can be glowing
or they can be dark.
Even those who see midnight
find life’s journey goes quickly.

July 14, 2019 
For Joseph May's Fives And Sevens Poetry Contest
(based on picture number 4)
Checked by Howmanysyllables.com

Submitted Sept. 11, 2021 for the ''J'' Contest, New Or Old Poetry Contest
of Constance La France
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Watt Avatar
January 24, 2020 at 3:59 PM
Andrea, how fitting this is for the image you selected. You met the challenge of 5's and 7's well with a poetic vision of life as a day's passage. Nice to see your grammatically correct "each of our lives is ticking" (instead of "are ticking"). Beautiful, thoughtful, evocative piece with a wistful nod to those who are gone too soon. Congrats on your placement in Brian's contest ~ John
Ibeh Avatar
January 24, 2020 at 12:53 PM
Beautiful, Andrea!:-) Heartiest congratulation on your win!
Kereopa Avatar
July 22, 2019 at 5:51 AM
Congratulations on your win Andrea
Andresen Avatar
July 22, 2019 at 5:13 AM
- Congratulations on your top win, Andrea - A really good description of life's journey :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Agustin Avatar
July 22, 2019 at 2:23 AM
Wow! Congrats. Thanks for this poetic reality... God bless you.
Mcgee Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 10:19 PM
Congrats on your first place win with this so true poem.
Warrior Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 7:54 PM
Congrats!! my friend...very well crafted Andrea...^WW^ :o)
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 2:51 PM
No surprise to see this wonderful poem at the top of the list Andrea! Congratulations on your deserving win! : ) xxoo
Wolf Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 2:33 PM
Well-done... Timing IS everything. Congrats on your first-place win, Andrea! Best wishes, Gershon
Canerdy Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 2:23 PM
Andrea, CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
Blodgett Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 2:21 PM
A day in the life of.........beautifully expressed. Lonna
Ravidas Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 2:16 PM
I can't help wondering how differently people see the same things) I love your choka, Andrea. My best congrats on gold of gold.
May Avatar
July 21, 2019 at 2:08 PM
Each tick of the clock takes us closer to our destination, Congrats on your win Andrea..
Neumann Avatar
July 18, 2019 at 5:45 AM
Beautiful.
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 17, 2019 at 3:56 PM
When we are young we think we have all the time in the world and we don't realize how quickly life passes. A great entry my friend. xxoo
Andresen Avatar
July 16, 2019 at 2:24 PM
- So true and great written, Andrea - GL in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Godwin Avatar
July 16, 2019 at 2:13 PM
Somber and profound, an excellent entry! I hope to write for this one, but the clock's a'tickin'. Love, CayCay
Johnson Avatar
July 15, 2019 at 4:08 PM
And some lives evenings are spent in mourning. As time keeps ticking as some are adjourning. To where we go when time stands still. As the clock still ticks until God's will. :) You know me Andrea, I'm just usually inspired by others poetry to just interject a bit of my own. <3 :) Awesome poem btw, yours, not mine. :)
Proxenos Avatar
July 15, 2019 at 3:46 PM
Hi Andrea, from the moment we are born we die a day at a time as the clock ticks its way to our end, some sadly sooner, than later. Great write - best of luck, Hugs, Jennifer.
Anish Avatar
July 15, 2019 at 11:50 AM
Nice poem Andrea! I continue to write - for pay articles about collectibles - for money! I hope you win the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
De Beaulieu Avatar
July 14, 2019 at 5:44 PM
Hello Andrea, these words are so true. For the life journey. have a nice evening my friend,
Rodrigues Avatar
July 14, 2019 at 4:02 PM
A beautiful write! So fast the clock ticks, though hours seem to go slow they fly with wings unseen until we see many loved ones lifting off. A lovely write that should find a win!
Adams Avatar
July 14, 2019 at 2:54 PM
this is nicely penned Andrea, i like where your thoughts went for this contest! One never knows how long the destination will be or how many bumps we will have in our journey.... :) hugs
Roper Avatar
July 14, 2019 at 1:05 PM
I love this poem, Andrea, good luck in the contest. Hugs
Michael Avatar
July 14, 2019 at 11:41 AM
Wow, this nice...I like the style of the write...
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