Dr. Upma A. Sharma Poet Quintain (English)

Lifeless Out of Water

Lifeless out of water






Parting a beloved is no less than a curse,
Drowning will not at all fit into a slaughter,
As if emotions scrubbed off the vibrant verse,
Left all alone, the denied love charter,
Lifeless I wish to emerge out of water !







Written Feb 24th, 2015
For contest " Out of water" by Sheri

Awarded 8th place

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Sandra Haight April 4, 2015 at 7:27 PM Such emotion and metaphor, Dr. Upma. Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser February 24, 2015 at 8:24 PM beautifully done D.r Upma.. :) Hope it will win.. :) ................ I have been busy these days that I haven't been here in SOup.. thanks much for keeping in touch and remembering me despite small visits I have with yours.. :) ..olive eloisa. hugs

Andrea Dietrich February 24, 2015 at 6:27 PM the last line was the best for me. and the part about emotions scrubbed off a vibrant verse. GREAT metaphor!

Cherl Dunn February 24, 2015 at 5:48 PM A sad but meaningful work, love how you did the ending for it though you pulled it together at the end, giving it a truly poistive spin, cheri

Eileen Manassian February 24, 2015 at 12:46 PM A denied love charter brings pain, Dr Upma...a sad verse you have penned. Good luck in the contest....I wanted to come and give you a hug.

Dorian Petersen Potter February 24, 2015 at 11:17 AM Beautiful pen Dr. Upma! So sad, but well written verses, my dear friend. I enjoyed! A 7! GL in the contest! I wish you a very lovely day! In his light! God bless!:) Love and hugs! xxx D

Neva Romaine February 24, 2015 at 10:17 AM Hey Dr. Upma, stopped by to visit and say hello. This is such a deeply expressed poem filled with solemn emotion. Deeply introspective piece. Well done and good success in the contest. Be Blessed, Neva