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Lifeless out of water

Lifeless out of water Parting a beloved is no less than a curse, Drowning will not at all fit into a slaughter, As if emotions scrubbed off the vibrant verse, Left all alone, the denied love charter, Lifeless I wish to emerge out of water ! Written Feb 24th, 2015 For contest " Out of water" by Sheri Awarded 8th place

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Date: 4/4/2015 7:27:00 PM
Such emotion and metaphor, Dr. Upma. Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/24/2015 8:24:00 PM
beautifully done D.r Upma.. :) Hope it will win.. :) ................ I have been busy these days that I haven't been here in SOup.. thanks much for keeping in touch and remembering me despite small visits I have with yours.. :) ..olive eloisa. hugs
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Date: 2/24/2015 6:27:00 PM
the last line was the best for me. and the part about emotions scrubbed off a vibrant verse. GREAT metaphor!
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Date: 2/24/2015 5:48:00 PM
A sad but meaningful work, love how you did the ending for it though you pulled it together at the end, giving it a truly poistive spin, cheri
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Date: 2/24/2015 12:46:00 PM
A denied love charter brings pain, Dr Upma...a sad verse you have penned. Good luck in the contest....I wanted to come and give you a hug.
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Date: 2/24/2015 11:17:00 AM
Beautiful pen Dr. Upma! So sad, but well written verses, my dear friend. I enjoyed! A 7! GL in the contest! I wish you a very lovely day! In his light! God bless!:) Love and hugs! xxx D
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Date: 2/24/2015 10:17:00 AM
Hey Dr. Upma, stopped by to visit and say hello. This is such a deeply expressed poem filled with solemn emotion. Deeply introspective piece. Well done and good success in the contest. Be Blessed, Neva
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