Grace Eunsong Lee Poet Free verse

Life. Lights.

see 
even the lights
they live

a bike skims the riverbank
fish leap, catch the sunlight
like bursts of laughter
above the morning water

noon. hot summer
children are learning to sing
golden shafts slip through
open church roofs

an empty stone bridge
people returning home, carrying
things. the ferries are lighting
up for the night tours

streetlamps oil lamps
along the paths and into homes
sky bursting, spilling stars
into every child’s dream

See
even the lights
They live.


2010.8.


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I would love it if Soupers could give me some critical feedback. I don't even mind very very 
strong critiques as long as they're constructive. I'm always encouraged by all the positive 
comments you all give me, but I think it's time to upgrade my writing skills. ;) So come on 
and take my poem to pieces, people! :D

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Bic Gi-Sa November 20, 2017 at 4:07 PM A fine poem from a fine poet

Skat A January 3, 2016 at 6:44 PM You did well

Sylvia Coulstock November 6, 2010 at 4:43 PM Genuinely Grace this is beautiful.It's decriptive, uses good natural imagery has emotion and reads well Especially love the phrase regarding childrens dreams.You have a gift and a certain amount of applied technical ability.I think if you worry too much about learning how to write 'better 'poetry you will lose your raw talent and the heart will go out of it.Perhaps what you need is more faith in yourself.As poets we share our gift for other's pleasure.You do this very well. Love June (S)

Carol Sunshine Brown October 26, 2010 at 11:58 AM May your week be one of good health, may your heart be full of love, and your life give you amazing inspiration for your writing. I enjoyed reading your exceptional poetry and thank you for sharing it Grace. Love, Carol

Nette Onclaud October 26, 2010 at 9:26 AM A stunning piece that reflects the flow and tonality of your theme... and the interwoven images just put everything together, grace! lovely.. thanks for visiting my page.. warmest, nette

Doris Culverhouse October 26, 2010 at 5:43 AM I am having a hard time thinking of a critique because I do really like it so much! The flow could maybe be smoothed out in a couple places is all I can see.