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Life gossamer threads spun to trap prey spider lies in wait Death arachnid injects venom wasp wrapped in silk shroud death comes quickly Life 5,3,5 checked with HMS death 3,5,3 Lune (Mixed Pair) Poetry Contest Sponsored by William Kekaula 10/20/21

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/29/2021 10:20:00 AM

Back with congratulations Jan for this profound Lune. Wonderful imagery and depth. Hugs! Can't wait to see the dragonfly haiku!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 10/28/2021 10:28:00 PM

Beautiful haikus on life and death. The link is very subtle and beautiful. "Spideer", "wasp" - Great work. Congratulations!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2021 5:24:00 AM

Thanks Christuraj:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/28/2021 7:43:00 PM

Dear Jan, congratulations for your excellent win in William’s contest. Your captivating imagery brings the stealthy spider to life so beautifully. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2021 5:24:00 AM

thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/28/2021 11:56:00 AM

Congratulations on your creative Haiku win. Have a blessed autumn day....................................

Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2021 5:24:00 AM

thanks Paula, we definitely have autumnal weather, rain rain and more rain for 2 days now:-( hugs jan xx

Ann Peck

Date: 10/28/2021 9:11:00 AM

Dear Jan, Your poem is lovely about an unlovely subject :) That's not an easy poem to write! Congratulations on your very high placement!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2021 5:23:00 AM

thanks Ann:-) hugs jan xx

Hilo Poet

Date: 10/28/2021 4:29:00 AM

Jiminy-cricket, Jan, that's one that got away and talked about your intriguing Lune my friend, my compliments for your amazing piece and placement, Aloha!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/28/2021 5:18:00 AM

Thanks so much William i am delighted to be on the winner's list:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 10/23/2021 7:21:00 PM

Now, I know how to protect myself from bees and wasps during our fall harvest holiday (Sukkoth), when we eat in 'huts'/'booths' outside for 7 days. I'm gonna 'enlist' a few spiders to build their webs on the four walls of my little hut! Thanks for the idea. ~ General Wolf

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2021 1:03:00 PM

thanks GW:-) hugs Jan xx

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 10/22/2021 9:57:00 AM

You wove a creative spiderweb...Delice

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2021 1:02:00 PM

thanks Delice:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt

Date: 10/21/2021 3:27:00 PM

Jan, beautifully worded portrayal of life and death contrast and nature going about its business. All the best for the contest. Hugs ~ John

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2021 4:48:00 PM

Thanks John:-):-) will drop right by to read your latest xx:-) hugs Jan x

Eve Roper

Date: 10/21/2021 10:01:00 AM

Well done, Jan, not really sure what to write for this. Hugs and Good luck

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2021 4:47:00 PM

I admit i struggled Eve, got it wrong with my first attempt:-( hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 10/21/2021 3:39:00 AM

Great expression of natural existence and the requirements to do so woven so very well poetically! Well done!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2021 4:47:00 PM

Thanks Mike I hope I've got it right, i was originally writing about a dragonfly then re read the rules and my second poem wasn't a contrast to the first so i wrote this one instead:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/21/2021 1:53:00 AM

Your haikus are great. So many are afraid of spiders. I only hat rats. Hugs, not to the rats of course. :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2021 4:46:00 PM

I'm not fond of either Victor!:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/20/2021 6:33:00 PM

Nicely done, dear Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2021 4:45:00 PM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/20/2021 4:46:00 PM

Good topic, Jan. These are fun to do, aren't they!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2021 4:53:00 PM

I started one at school on Monday about a dragonfly then realised the poems need to contrast so I changed the idea and am happier this one is better for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 10/20/2021 3:45:00 PM

Nature weaves a web of the hunter and the hunted, Very nicely done Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2021 4:52:00 PM

thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/20/2021 2:21:00 PM

Indeed this is the way of nature Jan! How often do we wear a silken shroud as the old dies away and we welcome new life? Wonderful metaphor! I encountered the same challenge! So glad I wasn't the only one caught in the web of confusion! Best wishes for the contest! Hugs :D"

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2021 3:05:00 PM

thanks Sam, at least i will have a dragonfly haiku to post, its 5,3,5 and i prefer the traditional format so may work on it one day:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 10/20/2021 10:17:00 AM

Well Mr. Wasp won't be getting any sympathy from me Jan as his cousins attacked me a couple of years ago in Turkey. Love the images. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2021 1:41:00 PM

thanks Tom:-) Thankfully I've not seen many this year not until recently and they;ve been buzzing round my raspberry canes, hugs jan xx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/20/2021 9:01:00 AM

Brilliantly executed. I see the dynamic imagery in your splendid write. Win BIG, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2021 9:05:00 AM

Thanks Vijay on Monday i wrote a poem about a dragonfly and almost completed the second on the same theme then realised the second poem needs to relate to the first one and not be a continuation so that one is saved for another day whn i will turn it into a proper poem:-) hugs Jan xx