Jan Allison Poet Haiku

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Life and Death Lune

Life

gossamer threads spun
to trap prey
spider lies in wait

Death

arachnid injects venom
wasp wrapped in silk shroud
death comes quickly

Life 5,3,5 checked with HMS
death 3,5,3


Lune (Mixed Pair) Poetry Contest
Sponsored by William Kekaula

10/20/21

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Sam Kauffman October 29, 2021 at 10:20 AM Back with congratulations Jan for this profound Lune. Wonderful imagery and depth. Hugs! Can't wait to see the dragonfly haiku!

Christuraj Alex October 28, 2021 at 10:28 PM Beautiful haikus on life and death. The link is very subtle and beautiful. "Spideer", "wasp" - Great work. Congratulations! Jan Allison October 29, 2021 at 5:24 AM Thanks Christuraj:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley October 28, 2021 at 7:43 PM Dear Jan, congratulations for your excellent win in William’s contest. Your captivating imagery brings the stealthy spider to life so beautifully. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan Jan Allison October 29, 2021 at 5:24 AM thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Paula Goldsmith October 28, 2021 at 11:56 AM Congratulations on your creative Haiku win. Have a blessed autumn day.................................... Jan Allison October 29, 2021 at 5:24 AM thanks Paula, we definitely have autumnal weather, rain rain and more rain for 2 days now:-( hugs jan xx

Ann Peck October 28, 2021 at 9:11 AM Dear Jan, Your poem is lovely about an unlovely subject :) That's not an easy poem to write! Congratulations on your very high placement! Jan Allison October 29, 2021 at 5:23 AM thanks Ann:-) hugs jan xx

William Kelii Kekaula October 28, 2021 at 4:29 AM Jiminy-cricket, Jan, that's one that got away and talked about your intriguing Lune my friend, my compliments for your amazing piece and placement, Aloha! Jan Allison October 28, 2021 at 5:18 AM Thanks so much William i am delighted to be on the winner's list:-) hugs Jan xx

Suzette Richards October 24, 2021 at 11:16 PM Wow! BTW I once witnessed a struggle between a poisonous spider and bee and the bee won. Nature is a perpetual fine balance between life and death. Jan Allison October 26, 2021 at 2:26 PM That is amazing, isn't mother nature wonderful Suzette:-)

Gershon Wolf October 23, 2021 at 7:21 PM Now, I know how to protect myself from bees and wasps during our fall harvest holiday (Sukkoth), when we eat in 'huts'/'booths' outside for 7 days. I'm gonna 'enlist' a few spiders to build their webs on the four walls of my little hut! Thanks for the idea. ~ General Wolf Jan Allison October 24, 2021 at 1:03 PM thanks GW:-) hugs Jan xx

Delice Arleen Skelly October 22, 2021 at 9:57 AM You wove a creative spiderweb...Delice Jan Allison October 24, 2021 at 1:02 PM thanks Delice:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt October 21, 2021 at 3:27 PM Jan, beautifully worded portrayal of life and death contrast and nature going about its business. All the best for the contest. Hugs ~ John Jan Allison October 21, 2021 at 4:48 PM Thanks John:-):-) will drop right by to read your latest xx:-) hugs Jan x

Robert James Liguori October 21, 2021 at 11:48 AM Nice poem. I live in what was once a large forest, gutted pinelands... all kinds of spiders are here. I'm looking at one now through the window. You truly captured nature.

Eve Roper October 21, 2021 at 10:01 AM Well done, Jan, not really sure what to write for this. Hugs and Good luck Jan Allison October 21, 2021 at 4:47 PM I admit i struggled Eve, got it wrong with my first attempt:-( hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile October 21, 2021 at 3:39 AM Great expression of natural existence and the requirements to do so woven so very well poetically! Well done!! Jan Allison October 21, 2021 at 4:47 PM Thanks Mike I hope I've got it right, i was originally writing about a dragonfly then re read the rules and my second poem wasn't a contrast to the first so i wrote this one instead:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar October 21, 2021 at 1:53 AM Your haikus are great. So many are afraid of spiders. I only hat rats. Hugs, not to the rats of course. :) Jan Allison October 21, 2021 at 4:46 PM I'm not fond of either Victor!:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues October 20, 2021 at 6:33 PM Nicely done, dear Jan! Jan Allison October 21, 2021 at 4:45 PM Thanks Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich October 20, 2021 at 4:46 PM Good topic, Jan. These are fun to do, aren't they!! Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 4:53 PM I started one at school on Monday about a dragonfly then realised the poems need to contrast so I changed the idea and am happier this one is better for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May October 20, 2021 at 3:45 PM Nature weaves a web of the hunter and the hunted, Very nicely done Jan Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 4:52 PM thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Sam Kauffman October 20, 2021 at 2:21 PM Indeed this is the way of nature Jan! How often do we wear a silken shroud as the old dies away and we welcome new life? Wonderful metaphor! I encountered the same challenge! So glad I wasn't the only one caught in the web of confusion! Best wishes for the contest! Hugs :D" Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 3:05 PM thanks Sam, at least i will have a dragonfly haiku to post, its 5,3,5 and i prefer the traditional format so may work on it one day:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham October 20, 2021 at 10:17 AM Well Mr. Wasp won't be getting any sympathy from me Jan as his cousins attacked me a couple of years ago in Turkey. Love the images. Tom Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 1:41 PM thanks Tom:-) Thankfully I've not seen many this year not until recently and they;ve been buzzing round my raspberry canes, hugs jan xx

Vijay Pandit October 20, 2021 at 9:01 AM Brilliantly executed. I see the dynamic imagery in your splendid write. Win BIG, Jan Jan Allison October 20, 2021 at 9:05 AM Thanks Vijay on Monday i wrote a poem about a dragonfly and almost completed the second on the same theme then realised the second poem needs to relate to the first one and not be a continuation so that one is saved for another day whn i will turn it into a proper poem:-) hugs Jan xx