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Life

LIFE
                            goes on
                          we just be 
                      
                   our hourglass empties 
                 and fills at the same time 
              death is merely a pinch point 

       “cause slips through, rebounding effect”


Pyramids Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Joseph May
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Eve Roper Date: 6/22/2022 8:15:00 PM Love your take of the contest, David. Congratulations on your win in Joseph's contest. God bless my friend Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/22/2022 11:54:00 PM Thank you Eve, I do ponder the shape and destiny of the universe and the hourglass shape seems to fit as an eternal microcosm, cheers David

Joseph May Date: 6/18/2022 9:12:00 AM Congrats on your win David, Very nicely penned Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/18/2022 10:48:00 AM Thank you Joseph, I’m delighted with your placement, great contest by the way, cheers David

Unseeking Seeker Date: 6/18/2022 8:13:00 AM Back again to congratulate you ~ “cause slips through, rebounding effect” ~ wise words indeed! Congrats on your win, David Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/18/2022 8:34:00 AM Thank you seeker, I’m delighted and impressed you see potential in my words, sometimes I even surprise myself, cheers David

Alexis Y. Date: 6/4/2022 1:13:00 PM WoW! David, You penned a” good “ verse about life in the Pyramid form. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a nice day and weekend:-) Alexis Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/4/2022 1:47:00 PM Heya Alexis, I had a few attempts at this one, eventually my message of life continuance took shape, thank you so much for stopping by, cheers David

Jenna Logan Date: 6/4/2022 3:36:00 AM Great point made about life filling and emptying simultaneously. This is a fine pyramid, David. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/4/2022 5:08:00 AM Thank you Jenna, it’s really how I envisage the big picture to be, life, time, and the cosmos simultaneously going through the pinch point of demise to rebound into a perpetual loop of eternity, cheers David

Sotto Poet Date: 6/3/2022 8:09:00 PM David, you have written a poem that is exquisitely composed. This is a fantastic approach to the competition; I hope you do well. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/4/2022 12:46:00 AM Heya Lasaad, I hope people see the simplified analogy of time/life reducing into the pinch point representative of death, yet still contains its potential and information on the other side, cheers David

Unseeking Seeker Date: 6/3/2022 7:51:00 PM Wow! That’s a great take on the contest, David, all the best Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/4/2022 12:33:00 AM Thank you seeker, I believe the hourglass shape is a macrocosm of the eternal cosmos, perpetual in motion and filling as it empties, cheers David