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LIFE goes on we just be our hourglass empties and fills at the same time death is merely a pinch point “cause slips through, rebounding effect” Pyramids Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Joseph May Syllable counter PS 1/2/3/5/6/7/8 Picture (5)

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Eve Roper

Date: 6/22/2022 8:15:00 PM

Love your take of the contest, David. Congratulations on your win in Joseph's contest. God bless my friend

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/22/2022 11:54:00 PM

Thank you Eve, I do ponder the shape and destiny of the universe and the hourglass shape seems to fit as an eternal microcosm, cheers David

Joseph May

Date: 6/18/2022 9:12:00 AM

Congrats on your win David, Very nicely penned

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/18/2022 10:48:00 AM

Thank you Joseph, I’m delighted with your placement, great contest by the way, cheers David

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 6/18/2022 8:13:00 AM

Back again to congratulate you ~ “cause slips through, rebounding effect” ~ wise words indeed! Congrats on your win, David

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/18/2022 8:34:00 AM

Thank you seeker, I’m delighted and impressed you see potential in my words, sometimes I even surprise myself, cheers David

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/4/2022 1:13:00 PM

WoW! David, You penned a” good “ verse about life in the Pyramid form. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a nice day and weekend:-) Alexis

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/4/2022 1:47:00 PM

Heya Alexis, I had a few attempts at this one, eventually my message of life continuance took shape, thank you so much for stopping by, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 6/4/2022 3:36:00 AM

Great point made about life filling and emptying simultaneously. This is a fine pyramid, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/4/2022 5:08:00 AM

Thank you Jenna, it’s really how I envisage the big picture to be, life, time, and the cosmos simultaneously going through the pinch point of demise to rebound into a perpetual loop of eternity, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/3/2022 8:09:00 PM

David, you have written a poem that is exquisitely composed. This is a fantastic approach to the competition; I hope you do well.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/4/2022 12:46:00 AM

Heya Lasaad, I hope people see the simplified analogy of time/life reducing into the pinch point representative of death, yet still contains its potential and information on the other side, cheers David

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 6/3/2022 7:51:00 PM

Wow! That’s a great take on the contest, David, all the best

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/4/2022 12:33:00 AM

Thank you seeker, I believe the hourglass shape is a macrocosm of the eternal cosmos, perpetual in motion and filling as it empties, cheers David