Kristen Bruni Poet Rhyme

Level

Which reminds me as I stare
At your face so stern
Did I tell you how I saw
Your mistake, why don't I learn?

The way you talked and laughed
The way she whispered close
Did you forget I was there?
Did I become a ghost?

No big deal, oh really?
That's just the way you mingle!
Then why are we together
Might as well be single.

So now from my point of view
Let's look at it from there
You on the other end
Not funny, do I dare?

Stop and think a minute
How you'd really feel?
If you were wearing my shoes
It's much a bigger deal.

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Dr Hitendra Mehta January 25, 2011 at 4:24 AM Congrats Kristen on big win with this 'pointed' creative one. Was away travelling hence delay in wishing. Luv / Best wishes Hitendra Mehta

Kory Calhoun January 21, 2011 at 12:32 PM Hi Kristen - Congratulations on your WIN in Paula's contest. Best wishes, KC

Ralph Taylor January 21, 2011 at 12:19 PM Congrats, Kristen. Nice going. Enjoyed. xxxRalph

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 21, 2011 at 12:07 PM Congrats Kristen on your wonderful win in Paula's contest with this extraordinary entry... u sure made the point with your awesome lines... enjoy another sweet success with luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta January 21, 2011 at 10:40 AM Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest, kristen

Audrey Haick January 21, 2011 at 10:22 AM Hi Kristi, Congratulations on your win in the "What's the Point?" Contest. Always, Annalise

Carol Sunshine Brown January 21, 2011 at 9:41 AM Congratulations on your win Kristen in the "What's The Point" contest by Paula Swanson. Love, Carol

Robert Pettit January 20, 2011 at 9:20 PM Good wording and rhyming in this piece. One small suggestion: it would be a good idea if you presented the last line in your last verse as "It's a much bigger deal".

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 15, 2011 at 9:35 PM Cool and interesting write Kristen.. the levels don't always seem parallel in any relationship.. we just keep trying.. nice perspective on this one luv.. good luck with your first contest which I just entered.. if u need any help just ask the "Sweetheart" ..be glad to help u out if need be ...happy weekend..