Silent One Poet Rhyme

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Letting Go

Sitting upon the shore
time seems to move so slow.
Watching waves I adore
as reflecting stars glow

Tonight this night is mine
just me and the mute moon.
Tepid breeze feels so fine,
as birds sing their sweet tune.

Mind begins to ponder,
why life sometimes goes wrong.
Thoughts begin to wander,
fed up of being strong.

Sad eyes gaze into space,
tongue utters a deep sigh.
Rain drops caress my face,
masking tears, I can't cry.

Life's questions defeat me
answers I'll never find.
Waves rush in from the sea,
tide surge plays with my mind.

Their call sounds so violent,
soul yearns to drown in them.
Heart tells mind: be silent!
Sweet songs it starts to strum.

Thoughts tame, turning tranquil,
sunshine brightens dark skies.
Rainbow smile brings goodwill,
as phoenix spirits rise.

Silent One
21 January 2018

Experimenting with 6 syllables per line.

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Garima Dubey January 27, 2021 at 2:12 AM I don't know why but beaches , sadness and solitude is a combination which always does a wonder.Be it in a poem or in real life.There is something oddly satisfying about sitting upon the shore all by yourself.

Barbara Barry-Nishanian February 8, 2018 at 2:37 PM Third and fourth stanza quite moving. Makes me wonder what questions you have still unanswered about life.Love to discuss..sometimes nice to share. Beautiful...bbn

Janice Thompson February 2, 2018 at 2:33 AM I love the mood and visuals of this piece, Silent One, and the rhythm as it moves along. "Heart tells mind: be silent!" is well placed! A really lovely poem!

Abosede Ogundare January 28, 2018 at 3:00 PM It's so nice to read your poem again. And this great experimentation of yours truly shows the genius in you.

Muzahidul Reza January 28, 2018 at 2:23 PM Sitting upon the shore time seems to move so slow. Watching waves I adore as reflecting stars glow, ............ excellent rhymes Silent, thanks for sharing the poem here with us

Val Brooklyn Rogers Blk Panther January 28, 2018 at 7:33 AM Hey silent one you have a magnetic attraction for beautiful words. Keep the master piece machine going.

Susan Ashley January 26, 2018 at 5:04 PM Hmmm, another lovely 'syllable experimentation'... I think I like where this is going Silent One. Everybody hurts, but some are forever broken by a broken heart while others can heal with strength and hope to love again - I especially love the last line. Poignant emotions expressed with evocative imagery. Well done. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Rhoda Tripp January 24, 2018 at 11:06 PM Love the way the lament turns to hope and newness in the last verse. Sudden change of emotions. Great write

Shirley Petrandis January 22, 2018 at 3:38 PM I love the way you write! I am in awe! BEAUTIFUL! Silent One January 22, 2018 at 3:51 PM Thank you Shirley..

Freddie Robinson Jr. January 22, 2018 at 1:19 PM Strong emotional sails propel this gorgeous poem, SO. I love the same line as Mike ... fed up w/being strong. Pure poetry from the master poet. Love and smiles always. Silent One January 22, 2018 at 3:51 PM Thank you Freddie..

Mick Talbot January 22, 2018 at 11:38 AM 6 syllables per line, works for me! A beautiful sad poem too, nice one S.O. Silent One January 22, 2018 at 3:52 PM Thank you Mick..

Eve Roper January 22, 2018 at 9:30 AM Lovely, Silent One, make it feel so pleasant with the imagery even though it is heartfelt.. Hugs Eve Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:07 AM Thank you Eve..

Mike Gentile January 22, 2018 at 9:09 AM My favorite line, 'fed up of being strong" How this resonates with me. I really related to this one, Silent One. Your consistently high level of achievement remains as does your popularity !!! Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:08 AM Just words Mike and I don't know about the popular part.. Thanks for the feedback.. we all have days when we do not want to be strong..

Paul Callus January 22, 2018 at 7:06 AM Yes...on different scales, but everybody hurts, at one time or another. Some drown beneath the weight of the pain, others manage to reach safety. Lovely poem; the accompanying song reflects the mood of your words. Regards // paul Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:09 AM Thank you Paul, you are right and wise..

Jeffrey Spencer January 22, 2018 at 6:03 AM I miss the beach (ocean). It has been many years since and I feel a new appreciation for the meditative quality it has. I enjoyed your poem. Jeffrey Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:38 AM I hope you get to visit one soon.. Thanks Jeffrey..

Anisha Dutta January 22, 2018 at 2:36 AM 'Fed up of being strong!' Me also. I always find my thoughts reflected on your poem. Best wishes n Blessing Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:39 AM Thank you Anisha..

Donna Loughman January 21, 2018 at 10:18 PM This is an exceptional poem..the imagery of “rain drops caress my face, masking tears “ I felt your words and sadness...happy it ended on a positive note. Thank you for posting this...Have a great week...Donna:-) Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:40 AM Thank you Donna, I think many mask their emotions..

Maria Williams January 21, 2018 at 8:34 PM Especially beautiful Si, imaginative, poignant but the last verse ends on a positive note. particularly like the thought of a phoenix spirit rising. Excellent choice of music as well. I do love the Corrs....Maria Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:40 AM Thank you Maria, there were so many great versions of everybody hurts, but I like the composition of this one..

Cheryl Hoffman January 21, 2018 at 8:27 PM Mesmerizing poem and music Silent One; I'm still learning to let go at the ripe old age of 60!~Che :) Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:41 AM Thank you Che, guess it is something that stays with us for a while..

Andrea Dietrich January 21, 2018 at 7:13 PM This is really nice. I especially liked the imagery and description in the second to last stanza though the ending one was also very pretty. I see this time you did six syllables. I think it's easier to do poems by syllable count than by word count. Now I will wait for you to do lines with six WORDS each! Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:42 AM Thank you Andrea, deciding between a 4 or 6 syllable contest..

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton January 21, 2018 at 5:48 PM https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AiuC_CaObbI - there are no words beautiful or worthy enough to express the depth of what you convey, for either yourself or a message to others, with this poem. It is in the music. x Silent One January 22, 2018 at 10:42 AM That music is fitting, thank you Leanne...

Demetrios Trifiatis January 21, 2018 at 2:16 PM Achieving unification with the All makes one find harmony in his heart then he sees life with new hopeful eyes! An excellent poem dear friend, SO! Silent One January 21, 2018 at 2:59 PM Thank you Demetrios..

Arturo Michael January 21, 2018 at 12:25 PM Your opening stanza sets the scene...for a beautifully written poem...One in which I see myself...All the best SO Silent One January 21, 2018 at 2:06 PM Thank you Arturo..

Keith O.J. Hunt January 21, 2018 at 10:24 AM So universal, felt like the many lines you wrote here several times in my life, great write; love the line: '....fed up of being strong' great stuff brother;-) Silent One January 21, 2018 at 2:10 PM Thank you Keith, think many have been here...

Connie Marcum Wong January 21, 2018 at 10:20 AM Congratulations on becoming a lifetime premium member! You make us feel the yearning heart in this lovely poem Silent! : ) Silent One January 21, 2018 at 2:10 PM Thank you Connie..

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