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Let me take you to heaven

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With this poem of mine, I applied in foyle young poets competition(it is for poets under 18) but unfortunately I didn't even managed to come in top 100

Let me take you to such a place Where all of the sadness are erased Where there is no discrimination between a gender or race Where there isn't any trace of a devil, sin nor there is any disgrace Where angels sing you lullabies This is a place where nobody ever cries A place where only love and love lies Justice prevails all over it, lion and deer lives in peace Here the birds wake you up with their sweet melodies This is a place lightened by God Every corners of it are made up of transparent gold The floor is made up of marbels and expensive rocks Here the sun shines like emerald cut diamond And translucent glasses are used to make a perfect horizon There are two rivers like tigris and euphraties Between them is a shade covered by a canopy Here all the animal lives proudly in vanity And all the trees bear fruit abundantly This is a place where all of your wishes come true Here you will have whatever you desire And the people who hurt you shall be in a glistening fire Even the water of oceans flow silently here It will rain but there shall never be a storm or fear You will marvel at looking at the beauty of this sight Rivers of milk and alcohol flows and there are trees of life Here all are equal, there is no black, no white All walk together in the moon light People reside there forever And beside each one homes a river flows A place which is too holy for devil to enter Give the goodnews to poors that it is for only poors and repenters Here the first ray of sun signals the dawn of hope And every imperfection is wash away by glistening rain Sun may shine or there might be a shadow But there will never be any sorrow, tear or pain
16 September 2018

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Date: 12/22/2018 11:38:00 AM
What a great view of an idealistic world!
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Date: 11/17/2018 3:34:00 PM
Hi Faraz, what a heavenly poem that I enjoyed reading! I am surprised that this awesome piece did not place in the contest! You did a magnificent job! Have a gret weekend and continue to weave your magic with your pen! Pandita.
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Date: 10/18/2018 4:15:00 PM
Well, it must be Heaven! I don't think there's a place on earth as beautiful as this one. Lovely place, lovely poem.
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Date: 10/4/2018 8:35:00 PM
really well thought are an excellent poetic talent. ..a perfect human thought for an imaginative place
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Date: 9/23/2018 9:20:00 AM
Such an insightful view for someone so young Faraz. Your writing implies a depth and understanding of life beyond your years. I'm very surprised that this amazing piece didn't place in the contest. It is a beautiful journey into an idealic world.
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Date: 9/20/2018 6:01:00 AM
This is such a beautiful touching poem, I am so surprised it did not get into the top 100...
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Date: 9/20/2018 4:27:00 AM
Well written and touching poem! Thanks for the contest! Looking forward to the new heaven and the new earth! (2Peter3:13) when we will see your poem come true!
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Date: 9/19/2018 3:47:00 PM
It would be as paradise! Thanks for your heaven contest and the win. I just did not have enough imagination to physically describe it!!
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Date: 9/19/2018 5:18:00 AM
Lovely glimpses of heaven, my friend!
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