Let Me Look At

There are waves in the air and also in my empty room
Amid the dance in the veins, looming up an aching gloom

I toss and turn in sleepless night of sparkling stars in sky
Starlight in the passionate March wind, I miss your perfume

Hidden behind all others, you call me enchantingly
I am electrified and to no end, should I presume?

Like the ocean are your eyes leading me to lunacy
You look lovely as you walk in the cap of coloured plume

I’ll wait for you my darling looking at the full moon night
I’ll go down holding your face at the time of ending doom

Until the end let me look at your eyes from my bare room
The deep azure eyes are sort of balm for my aching gloom
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March 14, 2016
Syllables: 14 in each line: 6 couplets, 12 lines: Total syllables 168
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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March 27, 2016 at 12:38 AM
Pashang has written a lot of ghazals, and is very familiar with the form. He's told me they don't require having a refrain (I wasn't aware of that) ... nonetheless, it is my preference that they do. Hope you will join my future contests!
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March 27, 2016 at 12:36 AM
Hey Probir. Thanks for participating in my contest! This was a tough call for me actually because I DID enjoy your poem. But at the same time you broke the format with not having a refrain. Nothing for me to really critique on the poem itself, since it was well written, I just felt you were a bit too loose with the rules I had ...
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March 16, 2016 at 5:23 PM
Very nice ghazal... Please check your email
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March 16, 2016 at 11:43 PM
Thank you for the objective appreciation...
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