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Let Me Down Slowly

Turned his back, for he ain’t got no spine Invertebrate snail, leaving a trail of slime Stood me up, promised we’d go for a climb I waited all day, and it’s already nighttime Never trust slugs, let you down all the time Oops! just heard, he’s been held up on a tine Bite Size Poem no6 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Line Gauthier 10/06/2021

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/14/2021 10:15:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a cute/fun write. Enjoy your win/day with blessings..................

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/14/2021 11:48:00 AM

Thank you Paula, bit of harmless fun, makes a change for me, cheers David

Greg Gaul

Date: 6/13/2021 10:25:00 AM

A tidy monorhyme if there ever was one, slug and all. Congratulations on a most interesting entry and award winner.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/13/2021 10:43:00 AM

Heya Greg, thank you for looking in, I guess this certain slug paid the ultimate price, for standing up his date, if indeed he was going to show up at all, cheers David

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/13/2021 9:45:00 AM

Oh dear, David! So witty highlighting those feelings of being stood up! Congrats on your win.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/13/2021 10:40:00 AM

Heya Sam, I was trying to imagine what goes through a girl’s mind, left in the lurch by some slimy sneak, hell hath no fury, cheers David

Christuraj Alex

Date: 6/13/2021 7:47:00 AM

Interesting really. Congratulations!

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/13/2021 8:20:00 AM

Thank you Alex, just a little comeuppance for that let down slug, cheers David

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/10/2021 2:01:00 PM

ha! very funny one, david! the ending is perfect!

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/10/2021 2:11:00 PM

Thank you ilene, personally I’m not a fan of Escargot, but this guy had to go, for leaving his date, standing around all day, got his just deserts, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 6/10/2021 11:08:00 AM

A tine, as in fork? HA ha David. He really was a snail. That's wicked funny!

Jenna Logan
Date: 6/10/2021 11:47:00 AM

*Cheshire cat grin....;)

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/10/2021 11:35:00 AM

That’s what happens when you let a girl down Jenna, so he was forked either way, cheers David,