David Kavanagh Poet Tanka

Less Critical Acclaim

pretentiously lame
                  altruistically tame
                    boringly aflame 
                  creativity a shame 
         dull tanka ends much the same 



Bite Size Poem no.37 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Line Gauthier
HMS 5/7/5/7/7 
22/02/22

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Christopher Flaherty February 23, 2022 at 5:58 PM David Sounds to me like Pop It has and always will have an audience in particular the young Bring temporary fame and fortune But ends up much the same dull David Kavanagh February 24, 2022 at 2:39 AM That’s certainly one way of looking at this one Christopher, maybe subconsciously it’s what I meant, but on the surface it’s more a wordplay, great to see your back in the game, cheers David

Tom Cunningham February 23, 2022 at 1:51 PM You packed a lot into this short verse David, a form I haven't yet tried. Tom David Kavanagh February 23, 2022 at 2:16 PM Usually Tom when my brain cells won’t fire, I default to the tanka, gives that little bit extra wriggle room thank the senryus, thanks very much for stopping by, cheers David

Alexis Y. February 23, 2022 at 6:58 AM Wow!David, You've penned such a well-written tanka for the contest. And it's in monorhyme too? Eye-catching title and content.Best wishes in the contest. Have a nice day-Alexis" David Kavanagh February 23, 2022 at 8:18 AM Thank you again Alexis, I just done a little retouch on this one, maybe on second glance it’s worthy of your critical acclaim lol, cheers David