Legs Cry

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This failing body partly will not function well, for vertebrae broke. Could my legs cry, they would, but my words now carry me.

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Date: 10/8/2016 7:29:00 PM

I really like this. Paloma is correct. this is a most effective tanka, and the last line is stunning.

Darren White
Date: 10/8/2016 9:51:00 PM

Thank you for the compliment, Andrea, it makes me proud :)

Date: 10/6/2016 5:35:00 AM

Words succinctly cry out in pain, an effective Tanka.

Darren White
Date: 10/7/2016 12:15:00 AM

Thank you so much, I loved writing this Tanka

Date: 10/3/2016 3:28:00 PM

Wow, Darren, I just love the last line....Linda

Darren White
Date: 10/7/2016 12:14:00 AM

Thank you Linda, glad you like it :)

Date: 10/2/2016 12:16:00 PM

Thanks for posting this piece. Excellent..........A.M.

Darren White
Date: 10/2/2016 12:18:00 PM

Thank you so much :)

Date: 10/1/2016 5:05:00 AM

Gosh this moved me to tears Darren - your positive spirit and words will continue to move me:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 10/1/2016 5:07:00 AM

Thank you, Jan! (((HUGS))), Darren.