Leave a Whisper

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One thing I must know before we go any further than this
                        Words that must be sealed with a true kiss..
                           That when you leave and leave you must..
                              sorry-This is turning to more than lust:
                                 I ask you to leave a whisper in my ear
                                  An ending to this chapter,No sequel  I fear.
                      You didn't know I was awake when you slipped away
                                         I'm sorry you must leave
                                           ''don't go''''please stay''
                                   No words of this nature  may I say. 
                                    
                                ''Nor bring me any sense of  senseless self''

                             They get to close and with this I can not permit
                                     Memories of the faded face lingering
                                             Thoughts I can not forget.....
                         I could feel her breath upon my neck as she left me a memory;
                                 One that is fading tonight
                                  This- just one reason that I must write.
                        Should have I pushed,pulled,fought for what I believed to be mine
                           or continue to 'sleep' pretending tomorrow would be just f.i.n.e.
                                             This time  wasn't like the others
                                          that voice  could be my muse's muse
                     I kept my silence silent,something I've begun to abuse.
                      - If you feel your soul screaming at you with advice
                          Do not hesitate,prolong,ponder-Never think twice-
                  For in that time,your moment may have left,just dew,mist,simply gone
                          Grasping for something tangible''hoping ear shall prolong''
            Just leave a whisper so memories I will have to nourish a smile,it too needs help  
                                           to be seen every once in awhile.
                            Memory I do have,not of sight but sound.A beautiful whisper,
                                     A reminder to make life a little more profound.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 3/26/2016 1:43:00 PM
Thanks for the message. We shouldn't allow a meaning to slip away. Justin, sad to head you abused the silence... love Linda
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Date: 3/22/2016 11:19:00 AM
I prefer meaningful whispers like this one to loud and empty talk, Jai! Very sincerely expressed. ~ Regards // paul
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Jai Bankson
Date: 3/23/2016 1:24:00 AM
I appreciate that,thanks for stopping by.
Date: 3/22/2016 11:03:00 AM
Perfect!!!
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Jai Bankson
Date: 3/23/2016 1:23:00 AM
You were right,just a little tweak..Thanks for the catch
Date: 3/19/2016 7:31:00 PM
An enjoyable read! Light & Love
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Jai Bankson
Date: 3/21/2016 12:47:00 AM
Thank you madame!
Date: 3/17/2016 10:34:00 AM
WOW, what a whisper... Love and enjoyed, it's as simple as that. SKAT
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Jai Bankson
Date: 3/21/2016 1:21:00 AM
St Paddy--I was close
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Jai Bankson
Date: 3/21/2016 12:46:00 AM
I had on green socks;Thanks Skat A,sorry,my head hasn't been where it should too be for ''writing''Happy late St Patty's Day!!
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Skat A
Date: 3/17/2016 10:34:00 AM
hey Jai, you ain't wearing green today. SKAT
Date: 3/16/2016 5:54:00 PM
a pleasure to read you with such cunningly sweet persuasion of a song, jai... welsome to the hall of soup!..huggs
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Jai Bankson
Date: 3/17/2016 1:10:00 AM
Thank you
Date: 3/16/2016 3:48:00 PM
this is an unusual topic and I enjoyed this idea of wishing to go back in time and have a "do over" Good one!
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Jai Bankson
Date: 3/17/2016 1:13:00 AM
I wouldn't have done anything different...A good life lesson...These were some actual 'terms''Well worth it in the end
Date: 3/16/2016 8:15:00 AM
This is very good, in the second half of the poem you switched to "She" this confuses the narrative a bit, I would suggest you keep speaking directly to her through the whole piece. If you make that small shift you will end up with a truly special poem.
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Jai Bankson
Date: 3/17/2016 1:09:00 AM
I didn"t see it..Thanks
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