Laurentine G Poet Ekphrasis

L’Eau mysterieuse by Ernest Bieler

           who encourages who
   in regard to the depths 

         I stagger forward
    half aware 
         swathed in cloth 
    weighted 
             yet still I could float away

      I look to trespass 
wander too far
           deliberately take unsure footing 
   & tumble -
       catch the gasps of the onlooker

             spontaneity becoming momentum 
 
risk being the blank stare in the water 
     reflection as religion 
               a self-formed masterpiece 
      that can eradicate itself 
with subtle magic
           breathed in & out of existence 

until on the other side
           fabric clinging to me
               no longer seeking warmth 
       just looking to repeat 
   those first few seconds 
         absolved through abandon
                            & truly held

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Ink Empress October 5, 2026 at 1:54 AM Fave ofcous And because I say this is the queen's brilliance Resonates 💃 Laurentine G October 5, 2026 at 2:09 AM 🥰

Ink Empress October 5, 2026 at 1:53 AM Dear LG Im not surprised this is a top winner, its so good to see you post too! Ah! What a surprise! I see there, spontaneity too! Hah! I really love the line "spontaneity becoming momentum " made me think of something: sometimes I trespass, and I find no control, its either staying in comfort zone or just running wild free like a headless chicken! Theres no inbetween for me! I wonder why this happens ~ but lately, I am learning to be stoic. Not heartless. Just sailing through waters, choosing when to feel what I feel/ and I seem to get just warm waves no rain just smooth sails... stillness 🧘 Congratulations on your top win! 🏆 Some italian rose wine would do this time 🍷 Laurentine G October 5, 2026 at 2:09 AM Thank you so much Ink! Ahh the Italian red wine was amazing - let's go for that 🍷🍷🥰 plus a Hugo or Violetta Spritz 🍹😂 I probably am stoic but it's not my preferred position - I suppose the best is to just feel the feelings and move through them! Well judged wild abandon in the bliss zone is good though but best kept for the gym highs maybe. Every high seems to require its balance - either too much pre-thinking or post-thinking when all I wanna find is plain sailing!

David Kavanagh October 4, 2026 at 2:15 PM Well Miss Laurentine, this beautifully written Ekphrasis has been absolved with a nice shiny new trophy and well deserved too, you have treaded a fine line here, somewhere between a Freudian slip, and a slip into reckless abandonment, congratulations on a truly thought provoking piece, steady on! cheers David Laurentine G October 4, 2026 at 2:50 PM Haha well as the painting shows - it was just looking and the rest was just thought tangents (but haha I might be giving those alternative universe versions of me a run for their money at times! 😅). There are of course several takes on this one, the up front and centre one is being completely myself and unguarded and it all being a runaway success - but it's still so easy to second guess and rein true selves in. That moment of complete acceptance/immersion is a beautiful thing though before the critical mind catches up 😊 thank you so much for your fun comment 😊 your comment elevates and I'm most grateful 🥰