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Last Climb

Bone chilled, numb fingers
fight to clench the precipice
in frigid, thin air
against the restless mountains
he releases his burdens.






Written on 5/26/2016

Copyright © Laura Leiser | Year Posted 2016

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Sara Kendrick Date: 7/15/2016 4:26:00 PM I think that he did not make it to the top..Sad to be trying to do something and not quite make it..Reads like a winner..Sara Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 6/24/2016 3:16:00 PM 'Tis an excellent tanka, Laura; I love the ending! Congratulations on such a fine win! ~ Regards // paul Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 6/24/2016 3:49:00 PM Thank you, Paul. I am happy that you liked it:)

Sandra Haight Date: 6/18/2016 7:27:00 PM Very chilling, Laura, and the imagery leaves us hanging until the last line. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 6/19/2016 10:11:00 PM Thank you, Sandra! I'm glad you liked it!

Charlotte Puddifoot Date: 6/18/2016 4:49:00 PM as with many of the others, the numerical placement belies how good this really is; it's chilling in every sense, unsettling, and very well written - congrats on your well deserved win in my contest Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 6/18/2016 6:49:00 PM Thank you, Charlotte, for placing me in your amazing contest! Some of the tankas are just brilliant, and I'm glad you liked mine, too :)

Jan Allison Date: 6/18/2016 4:24:00 PM You left me dangling with anticipation of the ending Laura - love the imagery many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 6/18/2016 6:50:00 PM Thank you, Jan! I'm glad you liked my tanka poem :)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/3/2016 9:50:00 PM wow, I LOVE this . The ending is chilling. now THAT is a good tanka. Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 6/3/2016 10:47:00 PM I wanted the ending to dangle, pardon my pun ;) Glad you like it, Andrea!

Carrie Richards Date: 5/27/2016 2:47:00 PM Lovely piece that shows how one can "let go' and become one with nature! Nice one, Laura ! Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 5/27/2016 4:49:00 PM Thanks, Carrie! I appreciate your comments and observations :)

CayCay Jennings Date: 5/27/2016 12:43:00 PM Well done, Laura! So very good ... CayCay Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 5/27/2016 4:49:00 PM Thank you, CayCay! I appreciate you stopping by :)

Charlie Smith Date: 5/27/2016 10:42:00 AM Best wishes in the contest Laura... Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 5/27/2016 12:07:00 PM Thank you, Charlie :)

Janice Canerdy Date: 5/27/2016 9:15:00 AM A 7 for sure, Laura. Janice Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 5/27/2016 12:07:00 PM Thanks for the high rating, Janice! So glad you liked my tanka :)

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 5/27/2016 5:32:00 AM Excellent observations of the plight climers face Laura. ; ) Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 5/27/2016 12:06:00 PM Thanks, Connie. Glad you liked this :)

Kim Rodrigues Date: 5/27/2016 12:07:00 AM Teriffic! Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 5/27/2016 12:00:00 PM Thanks, Kim! Glad you liked it :)