Richard Lamoureux Poet Rhyme

Last Call

I've been here since the start of the night
lonley and nursing this premium beer
No one would think me  the confident one 
For many nights I've hung around here
Doing my best to smile my shy smile
Wishing and hoping you'll see it dear?
As I desperately imagine 
you venturing near

A quiet voice
not meant for a noisy bar
I'm not a rich guy
I don't have a fancy car
If you want respect 
I'll treat you like a star
Others might go further
But I'll be where you are

Good guys don't need to finish last
Gaze at me, so it won't be true
Those gorgeous eyes and pretty face
Grant me the gift of sitting next to you
You'll make this cowboy a happy guy
Just a bit of time, a minute or two
I can see a bit of sadness in your brown eyes
I'm willing to listen to all that makes you blue

Don't rush away, take your time
With you lady I'm more then content
Let me sit here and enjoy that lovely laugh
I may sound corny but it sounds heaven sent
Nothing is to trivial, tell me about it all
Moment to moment, a night well spent
Until the bartender tells us that it's "last call."
You smile at me and say "I like how this went!"

I ask the bartender to bring a few more drinks
This has gone a whole lot better then I thought
You, pretty lady, Who I admired from afar
You seem to like this quiet Cowboy a lot
You are oh so sweet and easy to talk to
And my stuttering tongue  is not tied in a knot
You whisper, "If you have just a few hundreds left,
there are things I can do that will please you a lot!"
 

For Casarah's contest
Written October 15, 2015.

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Dan Cwiak October 29, 2015 at 12:35 PM Big Kudos on this winner, Richard. I think I've been to this place before. Richard Lamoureux October 30, 2015 at 8:40 AM Thanks Dan, much appreciated.

Skat A October 27, 2015 at 9:56 PM Hello Handsome, some women know how to take advantage. Enjoyed.. SKAT Richard Lamoureux October 28, 2015 at 8:25 AM That is true, some med as well.

CayCay Godwin October 26, 2015 at 9:55 PM Congratulations! CayCay Richard Lamoureux October 28, 2015 at 8:25 AM Thanks Cay Cay.

Greg Hoffman October 26, 2015 at 2:32 PM Congratulations Richard on your top win Richard Lamoureux October 28, 2015 at 8:26 AM Thanks Greg.

Casarah Nance October 26, 2015 at 2:10 PM What a twist~ a much enjoyed adventure and take on the prompt. Thanks for entering and congrats on 1st place ;) Richard Lamoureux October 28, 2015 at 8:28 AM This was a fun contest and I appreciate you picking this one for the category! Hugs Rick. Richard Lamoureux October 28, 2015 at 8:26 AM Thanks Casarah.

Cherl Dunn October 18, 2015 at 1:09 PM Dear Richard This has to be one of the best good old boy, sad cowboy write I've read here on the soup, poor fellow, I've seen him sitting alone at a few old bars of the past, not so long ago, now I wish I would have paid more attaintion to him, good luck in the contest love the ending by the way it pulled the whole poem together beautifully, cheri and thanks for your awesome comments cheri Richard Lamoureux October 18, 2015 at 2:28 PM My pleasure Cherl, thanks for commenting on mine as well.

Monterey Sirak October 18, 2015 at 8:43 AM Oh, poor romantic befuddled cowboy. I was rooting for him to get the girl. I love the way you veered off at the end. Richard Lamoureux October 18, 2015 at 10:55 AM Ha ha, I'm glad I surprised you.

Paul Callus October 17, 2015 at 6:09 AM Full marks to you, Richard! Truly enjoyed this poem right to the last call. I'm sorry for both the cowboy and myself...we were both taken in by her!! I expect this to more than attract Casarah's attention. // paul Richard Lamoureux October 17, 2015 at 9:40 AM I hope your right Paul! Thanks for commenting.

CayCay Godwin October 17, 2015 at 2:28 AM I can easily hear this imaginative write playing on a country radio station. It is romantic and full of emotion, as well as entertaining - I was rooting for him and then I was floored, with him. Last stanza, 3rd line needs some space for clarity. Good luck in the contest ... CayCay Richard Lamoureux October 17, 2015 at 9:38 AM Thanks for your help Cay Cay.

Lindsay Laurie October 16, 2015 at 5:37 PM G'day Richard... you hit me with a sledgehammer with the final two lines. Your cowboy is as gullible as me - great poem - Lindsay Richard Lamoureux October 17, 2015 at 9:39 AM Ha ha! Glad you were surprised.

Eileen Manassian October 16, 2015 at 10:21 AM Nope, didn't see that coming. Hmmmmmm.....brown eyed lady wants to play, eh? Good luck in the contest. Richard Lamoureux October 16, 2015 at 1:05 PM Ha ha, what can I say, I'm a sucker for brown eyes. This poor cowboy ended up going home all alone.

Connie Marcum Wong October 16, 2015 at 2:58 AM A smooth poem with a great twist Richard! I really enjoyed it from beginning to end! #7 Richard Lamoureux October 16, 2015 at 7:47 AM Thanks Connie.

Arthur Vaso October 16, 2015 at 12:13 AM lol hey who do you think you are? Me? Loved this, amazing!!!! Richard Lamoureux October 16, 2015 at 7:48 AM Thanks Arthur.

Michael Tor October 15, 2015 at 11:56 PM Richard this was humorous and sad. The ending was great. I thought it was all that charm you were giving off but I guess I was wrong. It was the charm that was in your wallet. This is a very nice entry. I liked reading it read it twice. Good luck Richard. Richard Lamoureux October 16, 2015 at 7:49 AM Thanks, I reworked the last stanza a bit.

Jill Spagnola October 15, 2015 at 8:15 PM I enjoyed your meter and your rhyme which delivered your verse in perfect time, flawless form :0, jill and....it,s a 7! Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2015 at 8:17 PM Thanks Jill, I went with a twist at the end.