Laments of a Widow

I looked in the mirror and all I could see was the pain of loss, draped in jet-black dress with a veil of gloom on my face. I tried to smile hard but all I could see was a forced on gloss dabbed on my lips to hide the bitter truth of grief's trace. I endured the sufferings of life but this was a misery of death digging the grave of my love imprisoned in a wooden case. I tried to joke it off but my laughter was soaked in tear's depth drowning my joyous memories of him in whirlpool of distress. I believed the idea to live happily ever after with him on my side dolloped with love but losing him broke my faith in shards. I tried to flee from feel of a widow but my mourning couldn't hide; drab heart of mine is like his cenotaph desolated and marred.
Date: 01/20/2017 Note: For the contest (Form E) by Broken Wings. *Placed Third* The poem is true to elegy form but also a personification cause it personifies the character of a widow.
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Date: 1/25/2017 11:13:00 AM
Such a stunning poem, Afzal. Such depth of emotional thought, w/simplicity of expression. Your words sunk deep into my heart, it made me think of my father, and his pain after losing my mother, his wife. A great, truly great poetic offering. Love and more love to you always.
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Date: 1/25/2017 6:36:00 PM
I'm glad you liked it Freddie. Love & peace to you as well.
Date: 1/24/2017 11:10:00 PM
A 7 for this emotional, WINNING poem, Afzal! Janice
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Afzal Nusker
Date: 1/24/2017 11:12:00 PM
Thank you, Janice.
Date: 1/24/2017 5:53:00 PM
Hi Afzal, What a heartfelt and poignant write. I could sense a deep sadness within this piece. Congratulations on your fine win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
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Afzal Nusker
Date: 1/24/2017 9:58:00 PM
Thank you, Alexis.
Date: 1/23/2017 3:57:00 PM
Very nice, Afzal. We are getting some great representations of E form poetry from this contest!
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Afzal Nusker
Date: 1/24/2017 12:04:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea.
Date: 1/22/2017 7:32:00 AM
A well expressed elegy, Afzal:) always enjoy your writes:)
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Afzal Nusker
Date: 1/22/2017 10:10:00 AM
Thank you very much, Jo.
Date: 1/21/2017 8:24:00 AM
I hope this is fiction, Afzal. Never easy to bury a mate. Very moving write!
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Afzal Nusker
Date: 1/21/2017 12:44:00 PM
Oh, that is totally fine.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/21/2017 9:47:00 AM
Excuse my ignorance, please.
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Afzal Nusker
Date: 1/21/2017 8:59:00 AM
It's totally fiction, Daniel. This poem speaks of a mourning widow, whereas I'm a man. Thank you for the compliment.
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