Knotty

Is my life getting knotty! 
Which was once simple and fun! 
Love came like blue ocean-waves, 
lapping on my heart! 

When your thoughts aglow in mind,
Shine...flicker of a moment,
Hundreds of bright sunflowers
Blossom in my dream!

I utter a gasp...oh no!
My heart was never missing, 
I left it in a safe place, 
With you, for ever!

lovedodoitsu

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/9/2023 7:03:00 PM

Nicely done, Mala, so creative

Christina Bowring

Date: 11/7/2023 2:20:00 PM

Dear sweet Mala, many congratulations my dear friend with your well deserved win. What a beautiful, inspiring Dodoitsu as I’ve never tried this form before. Such gorgeous lines,’ Love came like blue ocean - waves’ ‘ Hundreds of bright sunflowers’. Vivid imagery. The last verse is absolutely delightful- giving and leaving your heart in a safe place with the one you love.So lovely. A real pleasure to read my lovely, talented friend. Well done! Love and hugs to you xx

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/8/2023 1:35:00 PM

Dear Christina, Such a delight to see you visit my page and comment. This is the first time I am trying "Dodoitsu" - and it's matching my feelings right now. There are times when you want to write a long poem, and there are times when you feel - a few lines are enough to pour your heart. Dear Poetess, you are the talented poet, and I am trying to learn from the gifted poets at this site! Love ~ Mala

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 11/2/2023 8:48:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a great creative Dodoitsu write/ending. Love It... Have Blessed Day...........................

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/4/2023 3:17:00 PM

Thank you, Dear Friend. Due to some other writing commitments in my home-language, I am a bit behind in replying to comments - I am very sorry. Have a great weekend, Paula.