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I train my body, every second day rest of the time, stretch my mind Pumping iron, playing heavy metal adds more weight, depth to rhyme Hitting a punchbag, lets off steam jabbing hard, tightly packed foam Burning calories, fires up my brain honed thoughts, will create a poem Imagination stirs, no holds barred muse unlocking, finding portal key Tonight sky’s the limit, ready to roll brain has other ideas, I fall asleep. By David Kavanagh

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Date: 2/17/2021 7:43:00 PM
"Imagination stirs, muse unlocking" However, "I fall asleep" Sounds about right. Your brain got tired, after all that working out and heavy metal music. This is cute, clever and very creative. Your thoughts bring a smile. :) Brandy
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David Kavanagh
Date: 2/17/2021 11:35:00 PM
Thanks again Brandy for looking in, its all so true, usually I’m fired up after a workout, poems can come easy, but sometimes if I don’t capitalize on the active muse, and wait to write in bed, well games over, cheers David
Date: 2/17/2021 11:20:00 AM
A good, well written verse. Pangie.
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Date: 2/17/2021 12:30:00 PM
Thanks Panagiota, enjoyed putting in the sleep bit, when writing poems in bed, the pillow seems to win, cheers David
Date: 2/16/2021 1:42:00 PM
ha! i enjoyed this, david...
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David Kavanagh
Date: 2/16/2021 2:03:00 PM
Thanks ilene usually I like to end with an axe blow, but I honestly got into bed after my workout feeling refreshed, showered first of course, imagine, muse was flying and ready and then fell fast asleep, cheers David
Date: 2/16/2021 1:08:00 PM
wish my brain would fall asleep lol but the muse takes over. love the wit here David:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 2/16/2021 2:09:00 PM
Most of the time a good workout and metal music sets me up, giving me ideas, but this particular night the muse just wanted to be left alone, and went asleep, cheers David
Date: 2/16/2021 12:45:00 PM
haha. You were gaining such momentum there and ended up sleeping. Nice humorous touch at the end!!
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Date: 2/16/2021 2:17:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, I was getting a rhythm going feeling my stride, I work out, from home, I’m sure you’ve experienced this before, everything falling into place only to fall asleep, waking up clueless, cheers David