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Knock Knock

I am so taking in by your wonderful talk
You come up upon my door and carefully knock
I dance all along strings as I carefully walk
Closer to your waiting arms I skillfully stalk

And I listen so carefully to whatever you say
It’s so good to love somebody close every day
As the twinkling in the stars, carefully play
Any song I can fall in love with, takes me away

And in this situation I so carefully weigh
Never does me any good to not ever get away
Life is so full of adventures living every day
But I think being in love is my favorite way

It’s been so long since I got so carried away
That’s why it’s not difficult for me to say
I will always be in love with you, every day
It’s so wonderful you came here from so far away

Lay your hand upon my heart and carefully knock
I always let you in as you skillfully walk
Lines you draw with your eyes quietly talk
I see it’s so peaceful here, away I never will walk

I wait so patiently for you with the tick talk of a clock
For your fingers on my heart to carefully walk
Some secret about being in love I can’t unlock
Don’t make me wait so long next time you knock

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Edlynn Nau Date: 9/4/2015 3:11:00 PM Just love this Cynthia & I do see one tiny tweak that will make this PERFECT. First, the rhythm, stress, beat are just lovely. I like that IT HAS a storyline (not all do) and we can all relate to that amazing feeling of falling in love. This took us all back or reminded us of what we still have as blessings. TWEAK- you have set yourself the task of rhyming with THE SAME end rhyme sound. Murderous task! You ONLY departed on vrs. 4, last line,TALK(away,say,day,talk). Login to Reply Edlynn Nau Date: 9/7/2015 3:39:00 AM I really enjoyed this Cynthia and people here have been wonderfully helpful to me too! Cynthia Ferguson Date: 9/7/2015 3:28:00 AM I see that you are very good at helping, thank you for reading, it was a fun one to write, I will fix that,

Old Buck Date: 8/13/2015 3:04:00 PM Cynthia: I have read your "Best" and some of the rest. My experience was "intense". I'm a silly rhymer so it's difficult to read so much "truth". Thank you for sharing your work with us on the soup. oldbuck Login to Reply Cynthia Ferguson Date: 9/7/2015 3:30:00 AM that is one of the nicest compliments ever:) especially with so much talent here on soup, I am humbled by the writers here,