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Knifes Edge

blunt open razor 
       shaving atoms off my face 
           pimples are irksome 
          i’ve had a terrible day
    as cogs appear through my jaw
       

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knifes edge prompt 
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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/28/2021 3:55:00 PM

Awful...lol...but shave anyway. ;)

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/29/2021 12:21:00 AM

Thank you Kim, only the human androids amongst us,will probably get this one, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/28/2021 1:52:00 PM

Well-written Tanka poetry derives its splendor from real life, and sometimes a fleeting glance provides the finest poem with the most significant subject. David, I wish you success in the contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/28/2021 2:00:00 PM

Thank you Lasaad, your comments and observations are very true, a slight tangential nuance of surrealism, can express so much more, cheers David