Black Eyed Susan Poet Tanka

Kites Flight

Red kite loses flight 
Bump bump bumping through the grass   
She runs to recast
     Kite snags on a jagged rock
     Rips a hole inside girl’s heart	


3/30/12 - Revised 4/2/12
for "Let's Go Fly a Kite" contest


A big thanks to Andrea for her ideas and suggestions over the past year that have made my writing better :)

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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl April 16, 2012 at 10:07 PM A wonderful journey with your Kite and congratulations on your winning piece Susan xx

Carol Sunshine Brown April 16, 2012 at 1:07 PM Congratulations on your win in Gwen's "Lets Go Fly A Kite" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Deborah Burch April 15, 2012 at 9:41 PM Susan!!Congratulations on your win! This is so adorable! So much said--so few words...Brava! big hugs,love deb

Gwendolen Song April 15, 2012 at 7:00 PM The bump bump bump was so adorable as I could envision this kite's plunge and see the distraught little girl. Congrats on a winning write in my kite contest! :) Love, Gwendolen

Dinda Minardi April 14, 2012 at 11:41 PM A really good one, Susan. I always like your poem; simple, deep and entertaining! :)

Elizabeth Wesley April 9, 2012 at 7:23 AM Different but wonderful ending for this lovely verse. I enjoyed so much!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 6, 2012 at 12:30 PM just letting u know Susan u have been "bitten" by Andrea.. she is going to let u know also.. regarding my new contst.. so once u enter your poem.. u must "bite" another poet luv.. happy easter blessings too..

Nette Onclaud April 4, 2012 at 1:40 PM oh, susan... a unique tanka with such senstive appeal.. thank you for enjoying my tanka for your recent contest... winning wishes and huggs!..:)

David Williams April 4, 2012 at 8:34 AM hey Susan love this, reminds me of my granddaughter, it happened to her..good luck..David

Andrea Dietrich April 4, 2012 at 7:32 AM What a TWIST, Susan. it's quite different from before. you are a real sweetie to thank me for suggestions. I value yours as well and am really thankful to have made such a good friend as you!

Brian Strand April 4, 2012 at 12:50 AM Thank you Susan for the much appreciated honour given to my tanka.Easter blessings to you and your family.Rgds Brian

Kabuteng P.Ink K. April 3, 2012 at 1:52 AM This is a really cool tanka, Susan! I liked how animated this seems, especially with the 2nd line-- I can almost see this scene unfold. And so true, that last line! Wish you the best in the contest and thanks so much for my placement in your tanka contest :D

Broken Butterfly April 2, 2012 at 4:21 PM I love your tanka also, best of luck in the contest and thanks for my placement in your Old Tanka Contest, I am really happy.

Carrie Richards April 2, 2012 at 11:21 AM What a nice dedication to Andrea.....and I love the take you used on this Kite challenge!! One usually equates kites with happy times....yours has a new, and intertesting twist!! Good luck in the contest!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 2, 2012 at 9:35 AM clever and cool write Susan.. and kudos to Andrea too.. she is a wonderful help here on PS and a tremendous friend.. good luck in contest.. thankxx so very much for my winning placement in your Tanka contest.. am so honored luv..

Joe Maverick April 1, 2012 at 11:16 PM I found this to be a real good poem that gets you into the idea Susan...)