Just This Once

Just this once, oh, please! For me? I promise you it shall be my last One more won't hurt, I swear you'll see I think it not too much to ask? Your doubtful gaze; you disbelieve That I could ever truly change My wicked ways, so long aggrieved You've left me now, our love estranged And I have but myself to blame- When I am burned by dying flames

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O. Sharon Molefhi

Date: 11/8/2013 8:16:00 AM

Enjoyed the piece...

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 11/8/2013 5:18:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed, Sharon. Thank you! :)

Robin Davis

Date: 11/2/2013 6:38:00 PM

Chan The Man this is a very powerful piece. I can feel the anguish and pain along with the pleas of one more chance. Nice job Hugs Thanks for the nice comment on my Stormy Weather poem

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 11/3/2013 10:11:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by and for the review, Robin! <3

Jake Ponce

Date: 10/13/2013 7:26:00 AM

So far this is my favorite piece from your collection of poems. Rhyming is my frustration and that's why I rarely do it. Your work, however, shines. This here is a special piece that made me feel like I got cornered at the edge of a cliff. Not in a bad way, though! \m/

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/13/2013 7:54:00 AM

Thanks, Jake; I really do appreciate the read, review and compliments; means a great deal to me. Thanks again :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/21/2013 5:41:00 PM

They say "when you play with fire you are bound to get burned". And, sometimes, when we try to change or do the right thing it just blows up in our faces, and no matter how hard we tried it doesn't work. But, there will always be another day to try again! Excellent writing, I loved your rhyming, too!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/23/2013 5:47:00 AM

I enjoy and appreciate your reviews, Kelly. You always leave something insightful and perspicacious. I appreciate the feedback; thanks, hon :)