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Just One More Day

 Just One More Day

One more day, mother, but not with you so sick;
We would walk your fragrant garden and flowers pick. 

Make some jasmine tea and just sit and talk,
Oh sweet mother, you are still my anchor and my rock.

I would tell you of my day and you would also,
In life, this deep sorrow and pain, I must sadly swallow.

Oh sweet mother, you are still my anchor and my rock,
One day, it will be me who on that golden gate will knock.

I'll be seeing you, was the music playing that sad day,
And in my heart and soul, that song will always play and stay.

I would tell you stories and we would laugh also,
In life, this deep sorrow and pain, I must sadly swallow.

My grief is deep and forever but full of sweet beauty,
I sat by your bed waiting for your death, with love not duty.

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December 2, 2015

Couplet

Submitted to the contest, Any Couplet You Wish,
sponsor, Laura Loo

First Place

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Submitted to the contest, Just One More Day,
sponsor, Laura Urbaniak

Second Place
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Poem

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A   Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 10:46 PM
Broken, Congrats on your fine couplet win. LINDA
La France Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 7:51 AM
Linda, thanks for the congrats /~
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 16, 2016 at 3:23 PM
A beautiful tribute to your dear mother Constance. Your ending choked me up. Congratulations on your deserving first place win. # 7 ; )
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 10:27 PM
Connie, thanks for the beautiful and the congratulations, and 7, yes it was an emotional one to write ~
Mcclain Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 7:29 PM
Hi Broken Wings, Wonderful poem, and very moving. Reminds me of my own mother who passed just this last year. Congrats on your win--way to rack up the victories, wow! Cheers, Brain
La France Avatar
April 16, 2016 at 10:06 AM
Brian, first let me say how sorry I am for the loss of your mother this year, of course I know this pain well, thank you for the wonderful and the congrats !
Smith Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 3:25 PM
A sorrowfully beautiful read, B/W. Congratulations doesn't seem appropriate...
La France Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 3:51 PM
Charlie, thanks for the congratulations, appreciate !
Haight Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 2:16 PM
So lovely, Broken Wings. Congratulations on your nice win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
La France Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 3:53 PM
Sandra, thank you for the lovely, the congratulations and the hugs !
Palli Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 1:33 PM
So touching, I feel for you. Well written.
La France Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 3:53 PM
Susan, thanks for your compassion and compliment !
Allison Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 1:04 PM
Dropping back again with my congrats:-) hugs jan xx
La France Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 3:54 PM
Jan thanks for the congrats and hugs xx
Pennell  Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 12:03 PM
very sad, very good congrats on your win
La France Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 3:54 PM
Stephen, thanks for the compliment and the congrats ~
Scars Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 8:48 AM
BW, this touched my heart the first time, and touched it once more...thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your top placement :)-luloo
La France Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 3:56 PM
Laura, thanks for another wonderful contest and for my placement, I am honored and proud ~
Bettridge Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 6:20 PM
Thank you for sharing this insight into your heartfelt experience of going through the unenviable but inevitable time with your Mum during your last days together. I'm sending you a big Hug.(xxx) Rob
La France Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 8:28 PM
Rob, thanks for visiting my poem and for the nice comment and for the hug, I needed that today ~
A  Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 12:34 AM
BROKEN, congrats on your fine win. SKAT
La France Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 1:20 AM
Thanks so much, Skat
Viswan Bhatia Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 10:19 AM
wow..what a wonderful and beautiful write BW :) Congrats on the win :) love and hugs 7
La France Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 10:27 AM
Remnants, thanks for the wonderful, beautiful, congrats, the love and the 7!!!
Inman Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 8:21 AM
...again beautiful write BW.
La France Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 10:28 AM
James, oh how I love that word beautiful ~
Tor Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 2:52 AM
Constance this picture is priceless. The Joy in your moms face holding you shows the love she felt for you. I am so sorry for your loss. This was a heartfelt write. My heart has taken a beaten reading and seeing all these lovely souls taken before their time matured. Congratulations on your heartfelt win...
La France Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 10:29 AM
Michael, thank you for the nice comment and the congratulations. Oh yes the poems in this contest were so sad to read.
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 12:22 AM
Your poem tugs at the heart Constance. You will always have the happy memories and I am sure a Big welcome when your time comes. Congratulations on your most deserved win!
La France Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 10:30 AM
Connie thanks for the lovely comment and the congratulations, appreciate ~
Lamoureux Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 5:13 PM
Beautiful picture and poem. Congratulations.
La France Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 11:07 PM
Richard thanks for the beautiful and the congratulations, appreciate ~
Haight Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 5:10 PM
So emotional and beautiful, Broken Wings. I so much miss my mom too. Congratulations on your win. 7, Hugs, Sandra
La France Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 11:08 PM
Sandra, thanks for the beautiful, the congratulations and the 7!!!
Allison Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 3:44 PM
Such an emotional write Broken Wings congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
La France Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 11:09 PM
Jan, thanks for the comment and the congrats ~
Scars Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 3:23 PM
Broken Wings.."My grief is deep and forever but full of sweet beauty, I sat by your bed waiting for your death, with love not duty." My favorite line.Thank you for being a part of my contest..-luloo*smiles*
La France Avatar
December 13, 2015 at 11:10 PM
Laura, I love that line also, thanks so much for my placement in your contest, humbled and honored ~
Inman Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 9:03 AM
Emotional write BW. Gorgeous last line.
La France Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 3:00 PM
James, thank you so much for visiting, yes, that last line really shocked me, it just came out of my pen ~
A. Sharma Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 1:56 AM
Very emotive n heartfelt write Broken.. Gl in contest!
La France Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 7:17 AM
Thank you Upma for your forever support of my poetry ~
Laurie Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 11:19 PM
G'day Broken Wings... your poem would make a nice melancholic song. I feel for your loss but admire your strength in putting up this beaut tribute - Lindsay
La France Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 12:44 AM
Lindsay, thanks for visiting and for that nice comment, appreciate ~
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