Just Dreaming

Walk along the shore with me and let me see you smile
Close your eyes and visualize a romantic tropical isle
Palm trees and a summer breeze, sunshine overhead
Conversation with only our eyes, nothing being said

A secluded beach just out of reach, the surf the only sound
Two hearts one in the summer sun, a blanket on the ground
A sailboat dancing on the horizon, sun is going down
Tropical evening, harbor lights, as we walk back to town

Was it real or was I just dreaming as we walk along
And as we walk, the ocean singing her enchanting song
Feel the sand between our toes and taste the salty air
A falling star streaks across the sky going God knows where

You touch my heart and my soul in this island Paradise
The reflection of the Southern Cross in your loving eyes
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Washington Avatar
February 17, 2009 at 8:15 PM
Very poetic vibrant images, thanks for commenting on my gibbous moon poem
Farmer Avatar
February 17, 2009 at 1:05 PM
I enjoyed reading this sonnet, and love your unusual meter. Lovely imagery captured in your lines.
Haniff Avatar
January 7, 2009 at 3:34 PM
lovely rhythm and great image, love it....always Maryam
Bickerstaffe Avatar
December 3, 2008 at 5:20 AM
Lovely flow and rhyming... full of gentle emotion and splendid imagery. Well done!! Best wishes, Keith
Reese Avatar
November 3, 2008 at 7:55 AM
Lines 5 and 7 would fit if you simply take "A" out that starts those lines.
Reese Avatar
November 3, 2008 at 7:38 AM
You have a beautiful poems it it's not a Sonnet. Sonnets are done in 10 soft hard syllable per line. This is neither. Your meter lines 1,2,3,6,8 &11 are written in a meter called trochee which is a hard soft meter and the opposite of iambic. It's a much hard and richer meter then iambic. If you make the rest of this poem the same and keep it the length you have it now You'd have written a poem far above the abilities of most. I've give you a 7 simply because of the potential this poem has.
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September 26, 2008 at 11:30 AM
Dear Vincce: This a very beautiful and romantic love poem. I can picrture myself in the same spot with my own love. Thanks for reading my poem. I'm glad you liked it. I wrote another poem titled Am I Dreaming? Try Destiny, my first and my best poem. Sincerely, Janice Herzog xoxo
Aissaoui Avatar
September 17, 2008 at 4:14 AM
Extremely well written. Thank you for sharing it.
Wilkins Avatar
September 15, 2008 at 1:15 PM
truely beautiful poem take care Crystalx
White Avatar
September 13, 2008 at 12:59 PM
what a beautifully writtrn love poem, very eloquent, take care D-nyce
Jordan Avatar
September 12, 2008 at 8:18 PM
Vince BRAVO - absolutely amazing rhyme and flow with outstanding imaginary - Vince thank you for your friendship and support of my poetry - May God bless you and your family always
Foulk Avatar
September 12, 2008 at 1:48 PM
after reading this, wished I had a beach to walk on, to look at the ocean. this was a warm piece you write so well. thank you for reading my poem and for your comment
Chamma Avatar
September 12, 2008 at 1:10 PM
That's a great write Vince...Images and feelings...Thank you for sharing... TYOne, Farah
Buys Avatar
September 12, 2008 at 8:38 AM
This is superb on every conceivable level. Very well written and so picturesque. Great atmosphere, romantic and need I go on? Very, very well done. Regards Heidie
Reynolds Avatar
September 12, 2008 at 3:50 AM
Oh, man! I wanna come along! Please God, let me go there!!! One day....one day I shall see that southern cross from out atop the deep blue...lovely images here, sigh, Kristin
Spence Sr Avatar
September 11, 2008 at 3:44 PM
Hey Vince, way to go my friend! This reminds me of Jamaica in the Caribbean. I just love the beach and the clear sea with the sun set. The images are wonderful. This is memory refreshing. Thanks for your thoughts and prayers. My surgery is tomorrow at 11:00 a.m. Great job! ~Joseph
Winter Avatar
September 11, 2008 at 12:18 PM
Gosh Vince, what are you trying to do - depress us all? ~lol~ Just teasing. Too beautiful and man oh man do I wish I was there. What a gorgeous sonnet! Just breathtaking. Love, Shar
Zahed Avatar
September 11, 2008 at 11:51 AM
This poem made me drift into dreams....It is enriched with beautiful senses that made the poem come alive....Lovely write, as always....Sara...
Kelly Avatar
September 11, 2008 at 10:42 AM
Great piece , Vince and great dream to enjoy !!! ... Now back to the nightmare of real world , UCKKKK !!! . PS , Love all the song titles in this pece ....
Richards Avatar
September 11, 2008 at 10:04 AM
This is a dream worth keeping! I hope I dream of this same place tonight! Lovely escape!...nicely done!~ Carrie
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