L'Nass Shango Poet Haiku

Just a Perspective

This morning I woke
With a tear in my heart, I
Brushed it away late

I went outside, found
There tears on the morning grass
My child called it dew

I saw through both, one
Reality for our sorrow
Broken shines like dew

So my tears lingered
Long until the sun came up
And drank dry my cup

But left memory
Like a leaf to store its kiss
Beside budding grief.

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Joseph Spence Sr July 7, 2009 at 4:10 PM This haiku series is excellent. I like the flow of the words and the essence of the message. The story line is sequential. Great job! ~Joseph

Cesar Cantu May 28, 2009 at 12:04 AM This haiky feels like a rainy awakening, morning mist covered in rock-skinned paper; thanks for the experience C=

Brandy Megens May 26, 2009 at 12:47 PM very nicely put into imagery for the reader to see i want to thakn you for your comment it was an honor coming from such a beautiful poet you are an inspiration to me as well as a mentor

Izzy Gumbo May 22, 2009 at 5:59 PM Beautifully and deeply touching write. I really enjoyed reading these. :)

May 22, 2009 at 5:00 PM Nice haiku series. I like the similie in the last stanza. Enjoyed it. Karen

Shirin Neshat May 15, 2009 at 11:37 PM Good imagery, I can feel this poem and I have a clear vision in my mind.

Alley Poe May 12, 2009 at 5:23 PM I am liking this style for I am wanting more-Alley

James Peranteau May 12, 2009 at 1:46 PM L'nass,...could this be a sylph my poetic friend,..my mind at times wander,..your so poetic,..I just want to dream with your write! What ever,..I'm sure other poets have their notions. Write on my friend! james

Sharon Winter May 12, 2009 at 12:55 PM Wow. An amazing sequence of haiku. My favorite line (one of many) 'Broken shines like dew'. Just exquisite work. Love, Shar

Laura Mckenzie May 12, 2009 at 11:35 AM Wow well done you moved me with this group of Haiku's I couldn't wait to read each line! Laura :)

Kristin Reynolds May 12, 2009 at 10:14 AM Goodness, L'nass. no matter what it is you write, I can feel your heart within it. you are a brilliant man. this is so beautiful, what a talent you are. much love, Kristin

Veronica Joseph May 12, 2009 at 8:11 AM ah we have to continue with life although our hearts are breaking - really very moving.