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Deep freeze Help please Man down Sea drown Ice float Wreck boat Sink fast Top mast Life vest Chance best Search team Bad dream Storm front Harms hunt Cold air Look there Save who Those two Frost bite All night Wind roars Rain pours May day Hope pray Ships chance Last dance Some died Most cried bmdavey@10/31/17

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/1/2017 5:36:00 PM

oh it puts me in mind of a movie from last year where the oil rig went down and they were desperately trying to get the men off. Or Titanic!! I enjoyed this.

Brian Davey
Date: 11/1/2017 6:48:00 PM

Thank you, this is what I originally wrote for the Footle contest them realized that it specified just one Footle one.

Damien Knight

Date: 10/31/2017 3:28:00 PM

Wow this is a very well written footle where everything flows together in a tragic story! I shoild say it will be a winner

Brian Davey
Date: 10/31/2017 3:58:00 PM

Thanks again for your nice words however I had to pull this write from the contest because it stated only one Footle Only, so I wrote a new one for the contest called Black Friday