Joy

hues of gold paint sky
sunset's glow welcomes twilight
then pulls her curtain

C. Alvez

naturehaiku

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Jack Ellison

October 6, 2012 at 9:25 AM

So well described in so few words... kudos! Big hugs and much love, Jack

Pace Ink-U-Script

August 4, 2012 at 6:32 AM

When you go to edit, make the changes and scroll down to the bottom of the page and select "update"...I see that you still have the word "curtaint."..curtain

Michael Benkhen

August 3, 2012 at 11:16 PM

You portray elegant imagery. A few comments however... Midas and golden conjure the same image, and thus I don't know if Midas can serve as a proper adjective. The second comment is that you misspelled curtain.

Cynthia Alvez

August 4, 2012 at 12:17 AM

Michael, seems my edit did not take on my Haiku "joy"...I clicked edit made the changes, thought it had taken but it didnot...I really must learn this system. C. Alves this is my 3rd day here.

Cynthia Alvez

August 4, 2012 at 12:06 AM

Michael, thank you so much for your comment and critique. I changed midas to orange and removed the "t" from curtain. When time allows, tell me what you think now. I appreciate your help...I had used "Midas" to indicate a brighter, richer gold but I understand your point. C. Alves