Joy

hues of gold paint sky
sunset's glow welcomes twilight
then pulls her curtain

C. Alvez

naturehaiku

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Jack Ellison

Date: 10/6/2012 9:25:00 AM

So well described in so few words... kudos! Big hugs and much love, Jack

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 8/4/2012 6:32:00 AM

When you go to edit, make the changes and scroll down to the bottom of the page and select "update"...I see that you still have the word "curtaint."..curtain

Michael Benkhen

Date: 8/3/2012 11:16:00 PM

You portray elegant imagery. A few comments however... Midas and golden conjure the same image, and thus I don't know if Midas can serve as a proper adjective. The second comment is that you misspelled curtain.

Cynthia Alvez
Date: 8/4/2012 12:17:00 AM

Michael, seems my edit did not take on my Haiku "joy"...I clicked edit made the changes, thought it had taken but it didnot...I really must learn this system. C. Alves this is my 3rd day here.

Cynthia Alvez
Date: 8/4/2012 12:06:00 AM

Michael, thank you so much for your comment and critique. I changed midas to orange and removed the "t" from curtain. When time allows, tell me what you think now. I appreciate your help...I had used "Midas" to indicate a brighter, richer gold but I understand your point. C. Alves

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 8/3/2012 11:14:00 PM

Excellent Haiku!!!

Cynthia Alvez
Date: 8/4/2012 12:09:00 AM

Thank you "Pace" for your glowing comment. I'm smiling here! C. Alvez

Joy

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